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Alexander Noire
« on: June 11, 2018, 09:25:24 PM »
CHARACTER
Name: Alexander Noire
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Aka Tarot

Age: 26

Species and Gender: Human Male

Symbol: The Tarot symbol for the Magician arcana

Occupation:Freelance Hacker

Appearance:Alex stand at an average 5'8 Caucasian male, weighting around 166 pounds with a mop of jet black hair. His normal eye color is brown, however, when his heads up display is active within his glasses or his mask, his eyes appear yellow. When he is not on a mission, he tends to where a black and red uniform and a pair of glasses, even though he is not visually impaired. These glass act as a heads up display to keep track of different sources while in regular clothing. While is in on a mission, or meeting with a client, he tends to wear a black and gray suit with a long trench coat cut in three parts near the tail. While in this outfit, he wears a mask to display his information.

History:Having grownup in Atlas, Alexander was exposed to the advances in technology that Atlas would bring, although having a father who was a systems technician for several large tech companies in Atlas helped. While his father would typically work at his lab on different project, from time to time, Alex would tag along to his father's work. Over the years, Alex's father began to become slightly fearful of who he was working for. Eventually, he was deemed a criminal as plans for a networking scheme involving different companies employees accounts being leaked for everyone. Alex, knowing his father would never do this, tried to defend his father, but no one believed the student. After his father's ruling, Alex took it upon himself to clear his father's name.

This is also when he took up a small obsession with tarot reading. Due to his obsession with clearing his father and the  tarot readings, his studies began to take a slump. That is all except for any class involving any form of information gathering and stealth. He eventually decided to drop out to focus more on freeing his father. He could not free his father from the charges he was given unfortunately.

This led him to resent the kingdoms and he decided to use his skills to benefit himself as well as, how he would put it, removing the kingdoms influence on the people and allowing them to have the freedom to everything. realized his loss and  picked up this ideal. He worked from behind the scenes, helping other people get what the needed for free, eventually though, he needed funds to continue doing what he was doing. Because of this, he started to work with other organizations that were not so lawful, eventually taking up the name Tarot as it expressed his idea of an untold ever changing future.

Through his means of business, he  managed to learn what he needed to create everything he would eventually be using. He now freelances work to anyone who will pay him for his services, usually leading to him backstabbing them if they choose to double cross him, usually leading to the employer be arrested and all traces of his action gone.

Personality: While he is never one to let his pride go bolstered Alex keeps a surprisingly level head under the veneer of self absorbed self-imposed holier then thou attitude, unless he is meeting a client for the first time. If it is a meeting about a job, he acts much more professional and even polite. After the first meeting, he drops his facade of professionalism and shows his true colors. Due to him not wanting his pride to be damage, he usually tends to work alone, not wanting to trust anyone on a job he could handle himself. When he is suffering from his migraine or fatigue, he become irate and pissed. While on a mission, he tends to ignore anyone else, if working with others, however, when he is alone he focuses on the mission. Outside of a mission, he usually tends to keep to himself, scouring the internet for jobs and setting up contracts with his next client.

Aura and Semblance:His aura is colored a dark red. His semblance allows him to create a small perception altering AOE that is around the size of an average office building. Anyone with within the initial cast will not really “see” Alex or anyone he is with. The semblance does not actually alter the mind but rather it just ignore that he is there. Anyone who enters after the semblance has been activated or any technology within are not affected. In addition, due to the massive amount of strain using the semblance costs, if Alex or anyone within his group were to make any form of aggressive or quick movement, his semblance would cancel out. Once activated, unless disabled via an aggressive action, lasts for 5-10 minutes, depending on the area needed to be covered. If the Semblance is used in quick succession for more then two uses, Alex starts to have small headaches, however if used to often the headaches start to become severe, usually leading to either a migraine or fatigued. If he enters this state, he can usually cure it
with a couple hours of sleep, if he is not pushed.

Combat Behavior:Alex tends to stay out of combat whenever possible, relying more on wit and words to try to deescalate. When a battle does happen, he usually tends to duck behind any for of cover and fire a small pistol from behind it while trying to flee and protect himself. While this is his normal method for combat, he does tend to use his remote controlled sniper as an intimidation factor, usually "relying" on the power of his enemies seeming like he has numbers. If both methods fail, he will use any other means around him to flee, even if he has anyone with him or not.

WEAPON
Name: *REDACTED*
Primary Form: Just a simple silenced pistol that can carry 18 shots
Dust Functions: It can fire standard Dust rounds
History: He managed to acquire this pistol from one of his first missions.

Name: Angel
Primary Form: A remote operated collapsible Sniper Rifle able to be operated from a small concealed device within his pocket. It is equipped with a standard clip of 24 rounds.
Dust Functions: It can fire standard Dust rounds
History: He needed a way to protect himself from a distance without relying on others.
« Last Edit: June 29, 2018, 10:14:51 AM by ArosFarron »
Merletta Yoru: The Shadow Hunter
Liliana Blossom: The Maven of Song (Team REBL)
Lady Blair Valka of Felwinter "The Lady of the North
Alexander Noire

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Re: Alexander Noire
« Reply #1 on: June 11, 2018, 10:50:08 PM »
Considering this is your fourth character we would like a little more detail everywhere but the personality and combat behaviour specifically. You also repeat yourself in regards to Alex dropping out and obviously could be more spaced out.

Other than that it's got a solid core of a character good job.
No criticism is too harsh so hit me with your best shot.

Calen Shrike - ASTC - First Year Beacon.

Saffron de Cortez - SALT - Third Year Atlas.

Amarant Lovis - (formerly of)ACCE - Headmaster of Atlas Academy

Ramalia - RASB - First Year Shade

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Re: Alexander Noire
« Reply #2 on: June 17, 2018, 09:08:26 AM »
changes discussed on Discord have been made
Merletta Yoru: The Shadow Hunter
Liliana Blossom: The Maven of Song (Team REBL)
Lady Blair Valka of Felwinter "The Lady of the North
Alexander Noire

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Re: Alexander Noire
« Reply #3 on: June 19, 2018, 01:43:48 AM »
Still could improve the spacing in the first few sections but still good improvements +1
No criticism is too harsh so hit me with your best shot.

Calen Shrike - ASTC - First Year Beacon.

Saffron de Cortez - SALT - Third Year Atlas.

Amarant Lovis - (formerly of)ACCE - Headmaster of Atlas Academy

Ramalia - RASB - First Year Shade

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Re: Alexander Noire
« Reply #4 on: June 22, 2018, 10:57:33 AM »
As King stated, with this being your fourth character, I will be a bit more critical of things so here we go:

Appearance:
This section doesn't give me enough details to really picture your character. Things like weight, skin tone, eye color, and things like that help better paint the picture for all of us who would interact with this character.

Personality:
This section is also rather lacking as it primarily deals with how he is when he's working, but doesn't really talk about what he is like outside of work.

Semblance:
More details here would help also. Is there a cool down between uses? Is there any drawback to him using it excessively?

Overall, I don't see any real big issues with the character. The only issue is that it's lacking in detail, especially with this being your fourth character. Feel free to PM or talk to me on Discord if you have any questions.
First Year Beacon Student: Rackley Winchester - The Hawkeye Sniper of Team CRSA (Crystal)

Second Year Beacon Student: Jett Davenport - The Playful Shadow Knight of Team MLDC (Melodic)

Third Year Beacon Student: Suntalia Lyn Ryker - The Voice of Thunder of Team PLSM (Plasma)

Fourth Year Beacon Student: Savas Carnelian - The Quiet Berserker Leader of Team SARK (Stark)

Beacon Professor: Oberon Falcov - The Man With A Plan / Team Strategy Teacher of Beacon

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Re: Alexander Noire
« Reply #5 on: June 29, 2018, 10:15:13 AM »
I do believe I have edited everything we touched on
Merletta Yoru: The Shadow Hunter
Liliana Blossom: The Maven of Song (Team REBL)
Lady Blair Valka of Felwinter "The Lady of the North
Alexander Noire

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Re: Alexander Noire
« Reply #6 on: June 29, 2018, 03:59:22 PM »
I still think it can use more details, but I won't make a big deal about it.

Approved 2 of 2 and moved.
First Year Beacon Student: Rackley Winchester - The Hawkeye Sniper of Team CRSA (Crystal)

Second Year Beacon Student: Jett Davenport - The Playful Shadow Knight of Team MLDC (Melodic)

Third Year Beacon Student: Suntalia Lyn Ryker - The Voice of Thunder of Team PLSM (Plasma)

Fourth Year Beacon Student: Savas Carnelian - The Quiet Berserker Leader of Team SARK (Stark)

Beacon Professor: Oberon Falcov - The Man With A Plan / Team Strategy Teacher of Beacon