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Billy Bone
« on: February 07, 2018, 12:33:25 AM »
CHARACTER

Name: Billy Bone

Age: 17 years old, 3ed of Machlude, 63 AD

Species and Gender: Female Faunus, Silver Fox

Symbol:  Longhorn skull

Occupation: Huntress in training at Beacon. Training to be the fastest and most accurate gun in Remnant.

Appearance: Billy is dark skinned like milk chocolate. She has coal black hair braided into many small tight braids that look like straight black hair from a distance with the occasional white and gold beads in her hair. She has narrow brown eyes. She stands at 6 feet tall and is 169lbs, a pretty fit build. Billy also has a silver fox tail. Billy wears a button up white shirt under a tan vest. She wears tight dark blue jeans and tan cowboy boots. She wears sky blue belt, and a sky blue, bandana/neckerchief that she ties around her neck that has a ceramic longhorn skull that hangs on it. She tops the outfit off with a tan wide-brimmed hat.

History:Billy grew up without any roots. With no stable home, she was always moving for her protection because her father was a ‘bounty hunter’ in Vacuo. No, he wasn’t a huntsman. He, Tar Bone, was more of an assassin and kidnapper for those who needed his services. It became a rule in their household to not ask questions about how his day was. Her mother, Shell Traveler Bone, did her best to please Billy’s father every chance she had, much to Billy’s dismay.

Because of his profession, he needed her and her mother how to protect themselves. He taught Billy how to shoot at a very young age. When she was old enough he told her of their family’s rare hereditary semblance of aura lassos and tired his best to unlock her aura and tried to get her semblance active before she was ready. Though it worked, it was such a physical strain on her after getting it working that she passed out. Needless to say that day that was supposed to be one of the most joyous in her life, was one of the worst.

Billy hated her father and his profession. She despised that he was grooming her to become a bounty hunter but she didn’t see another choice in life. It was either this or become a scavenger in her mind. Being a ‘bounty hunter’ brought in the big bucks and she could move out of the lawlessness of Vacuo to a quieter place where she can have a normal life. It wasn’t until the first job she had to take with her father that she saw that she had another choice.

It was supposed to be a simple job. Go to the edge of town, wait for the target to come in from the desert, kill anyone they are traveling with or get him on his own, and take him into the hideout. The problem was the target was traveling with an undercover huntsman. Her father went for the target and she went for the target’s bodyguard. Before Billy could get a shot off, the hunter pulled her feet off from under her and disarmed her. The hunter then fought Billy’s father. During the fight, both Billy and the target made a run for it. They were stopped by a pack of grim. Billy froze. There was a scream that came from the target and the Huntsman quickly jumped into action to fight off the grim.

Her father used this opportunity to run off back to Vacuo and left Billy to take the blame. But instead of getter her in trouble, the hunter talked her into helping them get into the underground ‘bounty hunters’ ring and stopping them. Seeing them put a stop to her dad’s old profession, she finally felt hopeful for the future. She wanted to give law to a lawless land of Vacuo. But due to her now being a target to the ‘bounty hunters’ since she basically snitched on them, the hunter had to travel with her out of Vacuo to Vale.

When they traveled they became fast friends. Sterling Silver, the hunter, convinced her to become a huntress as they talked as they went through the desert. He trained her on the road to Vale against grim then pulled some strings to get her into the next session of Beacon. Though Billy barely passed the written test, her accuracy with her rifle was an A+. She has much to go with using the hammer portion of her weapon.

Personality: Billy hates her father and needs to find him and wants to bring him to justice. She can first seem withdrawn and slow to open up since she couldn’t most of her life. But once she does, she is warm and caring. She craves stability and safety. When it comes to her past she is secretive about it and one would have to pry the information that her dad was a ‘bounty hunter’ from her. But she will tell people small things about her past, like that she’s from Vacuo and basic stuff.

She likes practicing her accuracy, and speed of her shooting, but doesn’t like practicing her semblance because it reminds her of her father. Billy has an affinity for stray animals and they tend to follow her home by the dozen. Once she even came home with a wild pony she found wandering in the desert. She loves dark country music, or ‘gothic Americana’ she likes to call it. She knows and loves to make ice cream when she can. Billy enjoys a good root beer float on a hot day, and a walk down to the water to cool off.


Aura and Semblance: Her aura is sky blue #87CEEB . Her semblances is a projected aura lasso that latches onto one thing that she can see. Billy’s lasso can reach 20 feet. Her semblance can phase through and around objects, grim, and auras to create the hard light lasso that wraps around the target. The target could wiggle out of the lasso, break it with their own aura, or wait for it to break on its own. In theory, she could use it like any other rope, but she doesn’t have the training to keep her semblance up longer than a minute out of thirty minutes to use it as such.



Combat Behavior:Billy is a backline snipper with her lever action rifle. She takes her time to line up her shots to get the best damage done. When she is up close and personal, she uses her newly being refined skills of the quick draw against her opponent, then quickly switches to her hammer. Being that she wants to be the fastest, most accurate draw she has an itchy trigger finger when it comes to attacking. She doesn’t use her semblance unless she needs to catch someone fleeing or stop a grim from striking a teammate or civilian. Billy has a bad habit of standing in one place and shooting this could make her an easy target. She's not very creative with her semblance and her gun. For example, she didn't know you could use gunfire to slow down your fall until she saw someone else do it during her initiation at Beacon. Her semblance rope is very weak and only lasts thirty seconds at a time, tops. She also relies too heavily on the rifle portion of her weapon instead of the hammer bit. When it comes to fighting without her weapon, she still has the problem with standing in place and planting her feet in place but she can throw and take a punch.



WEAPON

Name: Longarm

Primary Form: Longarm is a lever action rifle with a thick heavy stalk

Secondary Form: She flips it so that she’s holding the barrel of the rifle. The stalk transforms into a hammerhead with a spike on the other side.


Dust Functions: Billy can shoot fire dust that causes explosion on impact. She can also shoot ice dust that freezes the target in the area where she shot it at. Electrically charged bullets are able to be fired from her gun. Kinetic dust when shot from her gun will shoot her backward from the point/angle she was shooting at. It can also propel any non-sturdy object away from the point she shot at.

History:.After being taught with a pistol, she learned from the hunter she traveled with how to shoot with a rifle and found it much easier to get more accurate shots done with it. She thought the hammer was a good metaphor for her judging criminals with her weapon like the law judges with its gavel. Billy got her last two dust functions as modifications to her gun from Smokey Emberstone’s father right before the vital tournament.
« Last Edit: June 22, 2018, 05:21:37 PM by L-Money »
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Re: Billy Bone
« Reply #1 on: February 08, 2018, 05:59:08 AM »
Second character so soon? Someone's excited.

Now let's see..

Species:
Faunus is spelled as so. Not Faunest

Occupation: History mentions her travelling to vale so...why the fastest gun in vacuo? Is she still in Vacuo? Also state what academy she's attending.

Appearance
Instead of enumerating her features try phrasing it as one consistent paragraph, that or bullet the features. As is, it's basically a bunch of facts jutted down when a lot of them could be condensed and connected to each other.

History
Same thing seems to happen here from time to time, there are plenty of instances where you could avoid writing several sentences and just connect them with conjunctions. Content-wise the history seems okay but I would like to know about her situation after the plan failed. You say the Hunter(supposed to be huntsman in this case) brought her to Vale. How did she get into beacon? Did she even have any prior schooling? How are her academics, did she have further training? Add that to history.

Semblance
Does the lasso move according to how she wants? How tough is it? How long does it get?

Weapon
I'm no expert but I'm pretty sure from a holstered position pistols would be way faster up close, especially compared to a lever action rifle. Not really an issue but just putting it out there.

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Wisteria Lockheart - 1st Year student at Beacon. "Don't make me throw a book at you"
Shiroe Pendragon - 1st Year Student at beacon - "This is my monochrome reality" - Team MARS
Lavender du Lac - 1st Year Student at Haven -  "The harder I try the further things drift away." Team RWND
Ayaka Miyamoto - 1st Year student at Beacon. "Tsubame Gaeshi!" - Team ALIA
Vermilion Desdemona - 3rd Year Student at Beacon - "Only time you'd be above me is when your head rests on my pike"
Talen de L'eglantine - 3rd Year Student at Beacon
Kei Almas - 4th Year Student at Beacon - "Everything is ripe for the taking!"
Aurum LeBlanc - 3rd Year Student at Atlas - "Lay back, take it easy, and watch the comedy unfold"

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Professor William Nox - "To contain the world in a grain of dust *EXPOROSION*

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Re: Billy Bone
« Reply #2 on: February 08, 2018, 04:55:30 PM »
Thank you for the feedback, Xarias. I am excited. :D

I'll work on the phrasing and more importantly the spelling, also the semblance and weapon.
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Re: Billy Bone
« Reply #3 on: February 08, 2018, 08:46:57 PM »
I made the spelling and phrasing changes. I added a paragraph in history about how Billy got into school. I also cleared up the semblance.
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Re: Billy Bone
« Reply #4 on: February 14, 2018, 11:32:20 PM »
Should be fine as is

+1
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Wisteria Lockheart - 1st Year student at Beacon. "Don't make me throw a book at you"
Shiroe Pendragon - 1st Year Student at beacon - "This is my monochrome reality" - Team MARS
Lavender du Lac - 1st Year Student at Haven -  "The harder I try the further things drift away." Team RWND
Ayaka Miyamoto - 1st Year student at Beacon. "Tsubame Gaeshi!" - Team ALIA
Vermilion Desdemona - 3rd Year Student at Beacon - "Only time you'd be above me is when your head rests on my pike"
Talen de L'eglantine - 3rd Year Student at Beacon
Kei Almas - 4th Year Student at Beacon - "Everything is ripe for the taking!"
Aurum LeBlanc - 3rd Year Student at Atlas - "Lay back, take it easy, and watch the comedy unfold"

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Professor William Nox - "To contain the world in a grain of dust *EXPOROSION*

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Re: Billy Bone
« Reply #5 on: February 20, 2018, 07:31:46 AM »
We expect around two to three weaknesses in the combat behaviour but most every this is fine.
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Re: Billy Bone
« Reply #6 on: February 23, 2018, 01:35:27 AM »
Added about 4 weaknesses. Thanks for the heads up on that. Btw.
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Re: Billy Bone
« Reply #7 on: February 23, 2018, 06:25:05 AM »
Most of those weaknesses are a bit naff but togeather they are enough. Good job and +1.
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Re: Billy Bone
« Reply #8 on: June 22, 2018, 05:47:27 AM »
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CHARACTER

Name: Billy Bone

Age: 3ed of Machlude, 63 AD

Species and Gender: Female Faunus, Silver Fox

Symbol:  Longhorn skull

Occupation: Huntress in training at Beacon. Training to be the fastest and most accurate gun in Remnant.

Appearance: Billy is dark skinned. She has black hair braided into many small tight braids that look like straight black from a distance with the occasional white and gold beads in her hair. She has brown narrow eyes. She stands at 6 feet tall and is 169lbs. Billy also has a silver fox tail. Billy wears a button up white shirt under a tan vest. She wears tight dark blue jeans and tan cowboy boots. She wears sky blue belt, and a sky blue, bandana/neckerchief that she ties around her neck that has a ceramic longhorn skull that hangs on it. She tops the outfit off with a tan wide-brimmed hat.

History: Billy grew up without any roots. With no stable home, she was always moving for her protection because her father was a ‘bounty hunter’ in Vacuo. No, he wasn’t a huntsman. He was more of an assassin and kidnapper for those who needed his services. It became a rule in their household to not ask questions about how his day was.

Because of his profession, he needed her and her mother how to protect themselves. He taught Billy how to shoot at a very young age. When she was old enough he told her of their family’s rare hereditary semblance of aura lassos and tired his best to unlock her aura and tried to get her semblance active before she was ready. Though it worked, it was such a physical strain on her after getting it working that she passed out. Needless to say that day that was supposed to be one of the most joyous in her life, was one of the worst.

Billy hated her father and his profession. She despised that he was grooming her to become a bounty hunter but she didn’t see another choice in life. It was either this or become a scavenger in her mind. Being a ‘bounty hunter’ brought in the big bucks and she could move out of the lawlessness of Vacuo to a quieter place where she can have a normal life. It wasn’t until the first job she had to take with her father that she saw that she had another choice.

It was supposed to be a simple job. Go to the edge of town, wait for the target to come in from the desert, kill anyone they are traveling with or get him on his own, and take him into the hideout. The problem was the target was traveling with an undercover huntsman. Her father went for the target and she went for the target’s bodyguard. Before Billy could get a shot off, the hunter pulled her feet off from under her and disarmed her. The hunter then fought Billy’s father. During the fight, both Billy and the target made a run for it. They were stopped by a pack of grim. Billy froze. There was a scream that came from the target and the Huntsman quickly jumped into action to fight off the grim.

Her father used this opportunity to run off back to Vacuo and left Billy to take the blame. But instead of getter her in trouble, the hunter talked her into helping them get into the underground ‘bounty hunters’ ring and stopping them. Seeing them put a stop to her dad’s old profession, she finally felt hopeful for the future. She wanted to give law to a lawless land of Vacuo. But due to her now being a target to the ‘bounty hunters’ since she basically snitched on them, the hunter had to travel with her out of Vacuo to Vale.

When they traveled they became fast friends. He convinced her to become a huntress as they talked as they went through the desert. He trained her on the road to Vale against grim then pulled some strings to get her into the next session of Beacon. Though Billy barely passed the written test, her accuracy with her rifle was an A+. She has much to go with using the hammer portion of her weapon.

Personality: Billy hates her father and needs to find him and wants to bring him to justice. She can first seem withdrawn and slow to open up since she couldn’t most of her life. But once she does, she is warm and caring. She craves stability and safety. When it comes to her past she is secretive about it and one would have to pry the information that her dad was a ‘bounty hunter’ from her. But she will tell people small things about her past, like that she’s from Vacuo and basic stuff.

She likes practicing her accuracy, and speed of her shooting, but doesn’t like practicing her semblance because it reminds her of her father. Billy has an affinity for stray animals and they tend to follow her home by the dozen. Once she even came home with a wild pony she found wandering the desert. She loves dark country music, or ‘gothic Americana’ she likes to call it. She knows and loves to make ice cream when she can. Billy enjoys a good root beer float on a hot day, and a walk down to the water to cool off.


Aura and Semblance: Her aura is sky blue #87CEEB . Her semblances is a projected aura lasso that latches onto one thing that she can see. Billy’s lasso can reach 20 feet. Her semblance can phase through and around objects, grim, and auras to create the hard light lasso that wraps around the target. The target could wiggle out of the lasso, break it with their own aura, or wait for it to break on its own. In theory, she could use it like any other rope, but she doesn’t have the training to keep her semblance up longer than a minute to use it as such.


Combat Behavior:Billy is a backline snipper with her lever action rifle. She takes her time to line up her shots to get the best damage done. When she is up close and personal, she uses her newly being refined skills of the quick draw against her opponent, then quickly switches to her hammer. Being that she wants to be the fastest, most accurate draw she has an itchy trigger finger when it comes to attacking. She doesn’t use her semblance unless she needs to catch someone fleeing or stop a grim from striking a teammate or civilian. Billy has a bad habit of standing in one place and shooting this could make her an easy target. She's not very creative with her semblance and her gun. For example, she didn't know you could use gunfire to slow down your fall until she saw someone else do it during her initiation at Beacon. Her semblance rope is very weak and only lasts thirty seconds tops. She also relies too heavily on the rifle portion of her weapon instead of the hammer bit.

WEAPON

Name: Longarm

Primary Form: Longarm is a lever action rifle with a thick heavy stalk

Secondary Form: She flips it so that she’s holding the barrel of the rifle. The stalk transforms into a hammerhead with a spike on the other side.


Dust Functions: Billy can shoot fire dust that causes explosion on impact. She can also shoot ice dust that freezes the target in the area where she shot it at.

History:.After being taught with a pistol, she learned from the hunter she traveled with how to shoot with a rifle and found it much easier to get more accurate shots done with it. She also likes how hammers can build and destroy.
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Re: Billy Bone
« Reply #9 on: June 22, 2018, 05:25:11 PM »
Changes

In Age:
Added her actual age next to her birth year.

In Appearance:
Added some descriptions to Billy’s hair, skin and kind of body she has.

In History:
Added the name of the hunter’s name. Her father’s and mother’s name.

Aura and Semblance:
Cleared up how many times Billy can use her semblance within the hour. “1 minute within 30 minutes.” (Example: If she used it for 30 seconds at a time, she can use it 4 times in an hour)

In Combat Behaviour:
“When it comes to fighting without her weapon, she still has the problem with standing in place and planting her feet in place but she can throw and take a punch.”
Had a phrasing issue with “30 seconds tops” when I meant “30 seconds at a time, tops”.

Dust Functions:
Can now shoot bullets holding an electric charge, also kinetic dust that shoots her back from the point/angle she was shooting at. It can also propel any non-sturdy object away from the point she shot at.

History of weapon:
Added where she got the modifications.
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Re: Billy Bone
« Reply #10 on: June 24, 2018, 07:00:52 AM »
edits approved
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