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Nero LaFatch
« on: April 14, 2017, 01:30:20 PM »
CHARACTER

Name:
Nero LaFatch.

Age:
17
born Frost 1.

Species and Gender:
Wolf Faunus Female.

Symbol: 
Seven claw scar.

Occupation:
Beacon Student 1st year.

Appearance:
A 5'4", 115 lb. female, she almost always is wearing sweats and a long sleeved shirt, while also wearing a hooded trench coat, all of which is black. She has long, wavy brown hair, which is usually in a five minute routine form. She tends to wear a Gatspy hat when she is not wearing her coat to hide her ears. She has normal human blue eyes. Fair skinned and slim, the more definitive features are hidden by her clothes. She always seems to have her hood up, covering her wolf ears. The last notable feature is a claw scar over her right eye, apparently from a beowolf.

History:
Nero is extremely secretive of her past to other students, but put most of it into her application. She was born in Menagerie to two constructors, and quickly learned how to care for herself after moving to Vale using most of their money to move for a job opportunity. She grew extremely envious of hunters, wanting to live their life. She began training at an early age of six. She found it extremely hard to go into a stand-up fight. She preferred a more hit-and-run style. As soon as she could go to signal, she applied.

Due to her focus on training at an early age, the White Fang, most notably the violent ideology, has tried to recruit her, but due to her young age, they saw the youthful girl as too innocent to tell what they were planning. She actually did understand them, and has since dedicated her life against racists and radicals.

She learned many things, built weapon prototypes, and continuously trained the entire time at Signal. She had developed an anti-social attitude between students, especially racists, be they human or Faunus. She showed an acceptable work ethic with any assignment she was given and worked exceptionally well in weapon design. She displays an affection with weapons, as it is the only topic she talked about to other students. When her time came, she applied to Beacon Academy, hoping to fulfill her dream to have a better life than a common street rat.

Personality:
Secretive and quiet, Nero is not much for interaction with people. She has an inferiority complex. She is hard to evoke emotion from, but is very clear on her points and will always stand beside them. You can trust her for an honest opinion, but she has severe trust issues with new people. Her parents hope a team will help her open up. She does not talk without moving her hands for emphasis.

She is, however, extremely reliable when people need a silent scout or need a high priority target taken care of. She is also extremely good at keeping secrets, but may joke around in a way only people who know the secret would pick up on.

Nero has an extreme dislike of cherries, and a phobia of being in the middle of crowds. She is far more comfortable in nature, with a penchant for sleeping in trees or bushes. She also has a pet snake named Taijitu.

Aura and Semblance:
Her aura is a deep, nearly black, red. Her Semblance is the ability to change her body density, always to have her body act like smoke. The biggest drawback is her inability to move of her own power while her density is shifted, though momentum is conserved. She can keep up the form for a total of thirty seconds, then must regain her focus for six times the amount of time she spent in smoke form, acting as a toggled ability. If she expends all her time in smoke form, she has to wait for five seconds before regaining usable smoke time. If Nero is put into a fully defensive stance, she sets herself in smoke form whenever possible. She also cannot move for half a second when smoke form runs out. She becomes the smoke, losing all ability to move herself beyond holding herself together in a cloud, and can be moved by things such as prior momentum (the Cliff Launch pads, for example), the wind, or certain dusts. Nero cannot enter liquids, and is affected by environmental effects such as wind, though any gas is like regular air. She does not change size, but does not get altered by gravity to the point of flight. She can only make herself less dense, or return to normal density. There is a shift time of 0.25 seconds for smoke to solid. She only uses her semblance to be defensive. Nero feels some of the pain of any hit to her smoke form, and enough shock can force her to drop the smoke form. Explosions of force can force her back into physical form. She takes aura damage from explosions. Nero can reorganize what she is wearing and carrying by lowering her density and shifting the resulting smoke to the correct places, effectively letting her change outfits in one second, or can exclude items from the shift, such as removing clothes for a shower.

Combat Behavior:  Nero favors hit-and-run tactics, sticking to shadows and striking fast. She can fight a single humanoid one on one on even standings, though is susceptible to being outnumbered or outclassed. Her ability to turn herself into smoke makes her nearly untouchable against frontal assaults, though being surrounded makes her take a fully defensive stance, though her focus on speed and offense make her easily overpowerable if alone. Despite her ability in a stand-up fight, she sees it as a final option, seeing being revealed as leading to become overwhelmed.

Nero's full black outfit helps her blend into shadows to get in close to her enemies to deliver quick sword slashes or a barrage of shells. She avoids open areas whenever possible, even with allies are there. She can be very reckless in combat, not fully realizing traps or setups.

WEAPON

Name:
Death Bell and Nightshade (left and right weapons, respectively).

Primary Form:
Twin arming swords, made of a titanium alloy. It has been painted black over everything but the edge of the blade. the handle is curved to look like a shallow letter c.

Secondary Form:
Twin shotguns, firing an 8 buckshot shell spread. The weapon transforms by various joints in the blade bending and collapsing to form the barrels of both guns. a slot opens up on the bottom for reloading. The handle of the sword bends and forms the trigger and stock. One flat of the blade acts as the top, and is marked by Nero's symbol.

Tertiary Form:
One shotgun and one sword. This is achieved by only transforming one sword, usually Nightshade.

Dust Functions:
Dust has no function with the sword forms, but has a standard effect on the shells.

History:
Created at Signal, she is never without them in an area she can easily access. She is constantly tinkering with the design, to deal the most damage at close range effectively and efficiently.
« Last Edit: April 19, 2017, 09:45:47 AM by Pyro_Ferno »
Nero LaFatch- Smoke Specter of team ATLA (Atlas): "Silent as Smoke"

Mura Sakino- Capricious Kitsune of Team CARM (Carmine): "I don't know how to respond to that..."

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Re: Nero LaFatch
« Reply #1 on: April 14, 2017, 04:47:11 PM »
Alright, as I stated earlier, welcome to the RP board. We're going to do a group review of you character so anything that is mentioned below will need to be addressed. That said, I would like to apologize if I seem rude or blunt, but I just like getting straight to the point so we can have this approved and you can RP sooner. That said, here we go:

Appearance:
What's her weight, eye color, hair color, etc? Imagine if she was standing before you and you wanted to explain every little detail about her to a blind person. That's more or less what this is: we can't imagine what she looks like unless you give details.

History:
This needs A LOT more details. What did her family do in Menagerie? Why did she come to Vale? How was her years at Signal? These are just a few things that should be stated. If you need help building the history, then I recommend you read a few other characters and see what other people wrote. Overall, this is very lacking and needs more.

Personality:
Also, a section that needs more details: What does she like/dislike? What does she do on her spare time? What about her intellect? Is she smart or does she struggle with her studies? Again, imagine a mirror and you are trying to explain every detail to us because we can't visualize her without details.

Semblance:
You're going to need more details here as it's very confusing on what you're trying to say. Are you saying that she can become smoke or an impassable wall? Also, what's the duration of the semblance? Please clarify this more as this needs a lot more details.

Combat Behavior:
More details here as well would help. Every character should have a few combat strengths as well as a few combat weaknesses. Also, seeing that your character is 6'9", it doesn't quite match to have her be a speed based character that is also very stealthy. Her physique fits more with a strength based character so I would either encourage you to make her height shorter or to switch her combat style to be more fitting.

Weapons:
Please state how the two arming swords transforms into each other form. Also, in regards to the dust section: if she uses normal rounds for her shotguns then you don't need to state anything here.



Overall, this character has a lot of good potential, but is just lacking in some much needed details in almost every section. My recommendation would be to look at a few other characters so you can see what other people have written. If you have any questions, feel free to PM me or post in the Character Creation Questions channel on Discord and someone will be happy to help.
First Year Beacon Student: Rackley Winchester - The Hawkeye Sniper of Team CRSA (Crystal)

Second Year Beacon Student: Jett Davenport - The Playful Shadow Knight of Team MLDC (Melodic)

Third Year Beacon Student: Suntalia Lyn Ryker - The Voice of Thunder of Team PLSM (Plasma)

Fourth Year Beacon Student: Savas Carnelian - The Quiet Berserker Leader of Team SARK (Stark)

Beacon Professor: Oberon Falcov - The Man With A Plan / Team Strategy Teacher of Beacon

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RE: Re: Nero LaFatch
« Reply #2 on: April 15, 2017, 03:54:02 PM »
Thanks and updated

Changed the areas you highlighted
« Last Edit: April 15, 2017, 07:06:03 PM by Pyro_Ferno »
Nero LaFatch- Smoke Specter of team ATLA (Atlas): "Silent as Smoke"

Mura Sakino- Capricious Kitsune of Team CARM (Carmine): "I don't know how to respond to that..."

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Re: Nero LaFatch
« Reply #3 on: April 19, 2017, 01:11:38 PM »
After going through the ringer for a few days on this, the staff came to a conclusion.

Group Approved (JJB, Gus, Kaliot, Janus, Time, and Azure)
First Year Beacon Student: Rackley Winchester - The Hawkeye Sniper of Team CRSA (Crystal)

Second Year Beacon Student: Jett Davenport - The Playful Shadow Knight of Team MLDC (Melodic)

Third Year Beacon Student: Suntalia Lyn Ryker - The Voice of Thunder of Team PLSM (Plasma)

Fourth Year Beacon Student: Savas Carnelian - The Quiet Berserker Leader of Team SARK (Stark)

Beacon Professor: Oberon Falcov - The Man With A Plan / Team Strategy Teacher of Beacon