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Valentine Bloodfang
« on: February 10, 2017, 09:25:21 AM »
CHARACTER

Name: Valentine Bloodfang

Age: 18 born on the 14th of Amare, 63AC.

Species and Gender: Sanguivorous Bat Faunus, Female

Symbol:  A white bat symbol with a crimson coloured orb above it's head on a black background.

Theme:
Theme Music: Cyanite - Waltz With Vampires

Occupation: First Year student at Beacon Academy.

Appearance: Valentine has silver, curly twintails which come down to shoulder height with two dark purple ribbons keeping her hair in said twintails. Her eyes are crimson red in colour. Valentine is 5ft 3 tall and weights 108lbs and has really pale skin, she would look almost corpse-white if not for the slight red on her cheeks. As a sanguivorous bat faunus, she possesses two fangs that are clearly visible when she talks. Her breast size is a C cup. She is paralysed below her neck but thanks to her semblance she can move around as if she wasn't. She can be seen in a wheelchair when she is at home or if her Aura depletes. Her stance is refined, elegant and lady-like but also radiate a great amount of pride. She gives off a mysterious, unnerving and eerie vibe and she wouldn't be surprised if she made someone get a heart attack if they saw her in a dark alley at night.

Her usual clothing consists of a dark purple dress with a  Λ shaped neck, this reveals the shoulders. The neck part of the dress has ruffles on it and so does the bottom of the dress. A reddish-purple line runs down the middle of the dress which is also decorated with ruffles on the side She wears dark purple sleeves that also have ruffles at each end. These match with her dark purple nail polish. Lastly, she wears dark purple heeled shoes.

History: Valentine was born into a wealthy family as an only child. Her parents were strict and expected a lot from Valentine as they were one of the wealthier faunus families in the area. They were strict but at the same time they were really caring and they didn't throw a cold shoulder at her, they just expected great things from Valentine and she tried her hardest to live up to that.

Her father was a huntsman and her mother was a huntress so naturally, she wanted to become a huntress as well. At the age of 10 she was already studying really hard to get into Signal Academy when she hit 13. One day she was going down the 20 step staircase in in their mansion's main hall when she suddenly slipped and fell down the stairs. She fell unconscious after the fall and only woke up the next day. When she woke up she realised that she was in a hospital, she could also see her parents who were sitting next to the bed she was laying down in. When Valentine remembered what happened she tried to move but, to her surprise - and fear - she couldn't. Her parents explained that when she fell she broke her neck and her spinal cord was badly damaged, so much so that there is little to no chance of recovery. The news shocked her so much that she blanked out for a few seconds before she finally reacted as she started crying.

The hospital kept her for 3 months but her parents insisted that they can take care of her themselves and brought her back to their mansion. She was in no condition to even dream of getting into Signal but she still kept on trying every day to get up, to move her hands and feet again. She spent her day sleeping in her room or looking out of the huge window next to her, watching as the clouds ran through the sky and disappeared into the sunset. She tried day after day to move her hands, to no success.

One and a half year passed. She was going to be 12 that year, just 1 year away from the Signal enrolment exams start. She was paralysed neck down, this meant that she couldn't do anything to live up to her parents' expectation and she felt like she was a failure. She was still trying everyday to move even just a muscle, but no matter how hard she tried, her body just didn’t move. One day however, when she tried to move her hands she saw her hand twitching. She thought she is hallucinating but after concentrating hard she was able to lift her arm up. Pushing her limits, she was able to stand up from her bed after almost two years. Tears of joy left her eyes as she smiled and slowly made her way over to her parents. When they saw her, standing on her feet again they couldn't believe their eyes at first but there she was, moving like the accident didn't happen. They thought it was a miracle.

After this, Valentine found out that she still couldn't feel anything and after trying out different things she realised that she is still paralysed. She found out that she was able to move thanks to her newly manifested semblance because she cut herself once by accident and she could control her blood. She trained for one whole year day and night to get her body back in shape and to simultaneously train her control over her semblance. She got accepted into Signal Academy thanks to the fact that she was significantly ahead of everyone before the accident academically. She was also part of the student council during her time at Signal.

Now, after finishing Signal Academy with good grades both in academical studies and combat, she was accepted into Beacon Academy for further training so that she can become a huntress. She will be attending Beacon in hopes of following the same career path as her parents and graduate as a fully fledged Huntress.

Personality: Valentine is a friendly person with a great amount of pride. She can get along well with others once she gets to know them but acts cold and dismissive towards people who are disrespectful to her or who she doesn't like. Valentine is the type of person who you can get along with pretty easily when you befriend her but you really don't want to be on her bad side. She is quite intelligent and can read most people like a book by how they act and speak. She is refined, lady like and has good manners. Valentine  is also calm and collected most of the time and thinks before speaking. Her grades are always good, she never got a bad grade in class before. Valentine has a tendency to look up to and idolise people who have a lot of power in society and look down on people who, say, come from the slums or a farm. Valentine prefers to have control over what she is doing. If she gets an order from someone who is above her or who she respects then she will do it, on the other hand she doesn't take orders from someone she has no respect towards to or who are clearly not in a position to order her around.
She also falls just a little on the sadist end of the spectrum.

She is a sanguivorous bat faunus so she drinks blood instead of eating food or drinking water. Valentine doesn't like heat, thanks to her bat faunus origins. She prefers cold places that are not under direct sunlight. She also carries an umbrella because of this even in broad daylight, so that the sunlight doesn't warm her up directly.
Valentine spends her free time drawing, drinking tea, going on a walk at a park or simply sleeping if the weather is too sunny. Valentine is usually tired during the day as she is a bat faunus, and bats are nocturnal. She also enjoys just walking through the city at night as its a lot colder and darker than during the day.

It is a touchy topic to talk about physically disabled people around her as she takes it really seriously even when it isn't about her. This is because she is disabled too from her neck downwards but thanks to her semblance she can move around as if she wasn't. She doesn't want to tell people that she is disabled and she tries to do everything to hide it. This is mainly because of her pride, she doesn't want to be seen as "weak" or "helpless" in front of people.
As she is disabled, she can't feel anything below her neck. This is a really bad thing as she doesn't notice if something is hot or if she gets injured. To make sure she is perfectly fine she has to check herself regularly during the day and also checks her whole body every night before sleep so that she wont run the risk of an infection or anything serious like that. It is like a routine to her by now.
She has a wheelchair which she only uses when she is at home, if her aura depletes or if she just woke up.

Aura and Semblance: Aura Color: Crimson
Aura: Valentine possesses an above average Aura pool. This is thanks to the fact that her semblance is really Aura reliant so she is experienced at using her Aura. Her regenerative capabilities through Aura are very limited. She can only heal small cuts with her Aura.

Semblance: Sanguinarian Control - Valentine can control and manipulate blood cells and plasma. She can only control her own blood or an entity’s blood that doesn't have an aura or any blood that is not surrounded by aura but she can only control blood by surrounding it with her own. Valentine collects blood from any source that she is able to in a swirling, floating orb that stays near her at all times.The orb is connected to her main Aura pool and when the orb takes a hit, Valentine’s Aura suffers damage. There are many uses to the blood controlled by Valentine and each attack made by Valentine sacrifices some of her Aura in the process (If her Aura depletes she cannot use abilities that don’t require % Aura to use):

  • Blood Attacks - Valentine sends some, or all of the blood towards an enemy and slashes them with it in an arc. The blood goes back to the main orb after the attack with the same speed. These attacks aren’t strong by themselves, one attack can cut through skin and hurt the flesh barely but these attacks are better in numbers. Before the blood makes contact with something Valentine wants to hurt, the blood crystallises on the edge of the arc, where it will make contact with the surface and after a split second it goes back to liquid form. One slash = 1% Aura used.
  • Blood Crystallisation - Valentine crystallises some or all of the blood in the orb, effectively functioning as a solid object. Examples of how she would use it: She could make a protective barrier out of blood then crystallise it to absorb the attack of something. She could also transform the blood to assume a shard shape and send it flying towards an enemy and then crystallise it while it is travelling. This deals more damage than Blood Attacks as these projectiles are solid and sharp on the edges. After crystallisation, she cannot change the shape of the object unless it becomes liquid again. The blood crystals only revert back to liquid form after 1 minute. Crystallising blood to use as a projectile or a protective barrier takes 3% of her Aura.
  • Blood Orb: Detonate - Valentine commands the orb to crystallise and explode after a brief period in a direction chosen by Valentine. It takes 1 second for the orb to fully crystallise and during crystallisation anybody can visibly see what direction the orb will explode towards as the crystals will start forming in that direction first. Upon explosion, the orb shatters and about 30 small shards shoot out in the direction Valentine chose. After impact, the shards only go back to liquid form after one minute. This action costs Valentine 25% of her Aura and will not be able to use it again for 30 minutes as it would put too much mental strain on her.
  • Blood Clotting - If Valentine concentrates for at least 20 seconds she is able to make her own blood start clotting on a wounded area. She can only do this on wounds that are minor wounds. Examples of this would be if she cuts her finger or gets cut with a weapon. She cannot heal wounds that are more than one centimeter deep. This action doesn’t cost her any Aura.
  • Blood Absorption - Valentine can mix her own blood with blood that is not hers without her immune system rejecting it, allowing her to replenish the amount of blood in her in case she was/is bleeding out and lost/losing blood. Using this does not consume Aura.
  • Blood Marionette - Valentine can make her limbs move as long as they have blood in them. This also lets her move while her body is paralysed. Performing this action doesn't consume any Aura. She can only control herself or bodies that are not protected by Aura. She loses this ability once her Aura depletes.

The blood travels at a maximum speed of 200km/h and the crystallised blood travels half of that speed (100km/h). She can only conjure one blood orb at a time and this orb follows her wherever she goes. The orb can’t go further away from her than a meter at maximum and it grows in size depending on how much blood Valentine is currently controlling. She can only control roughly 5.5 liters of blood that is stored in the orb.

The semblance’s main weakness is that if the enemy can get rid of the blood orb it renders Valentine’s semblance useless, and potentially can neutralise Valentine too. This can be achieved by focusing the blood orb as the blood is surrounded by her Aura as well as her. Effectively, her Aura is split between the blood orb and herself. Easiest way of dealing with Valentine is damaging the blood orb instead of her as the orb cannot dodge attacks, it floats next to Valentine at all times and only moves if Valentine does too or when she commands the orb to move. Still the easiest target would be the orb as it's way slower than Valentine.

Valentine is unable to change the shape of the crystallised blood as well as she cannot control the movement of blood shards. This means that if she creates a protective wall of blood and crystallises it, she will not be able to move the wall around. It also prevents her from making the shards suddenly change directions mid-air, after she sends them out she crystallises them so she will not have control over the projectile.

Opponents can parry her attacks as her blood attacks become solid on the edge for a split second or if they are in shard form they can just be blocked or dodged.

Valentine is still a novice at using her semblance, this causes her to sometimes lose control over the blood she is using, this makes the blood fall straight on the ground and any moving blood will stop moving if either they lose movement or if they contact a solid surface. The blood that is in mid-air and is flying down towards the ground will not damage anyone it touches, just think of it as a water splash. A very red water splash…

She needs to focus to control the blood, because of this she needs to stand in place or move really slowly while moving the blood so that she maintains control.

The maximum range she can control the blood is 20 meters maximum, origin point is the blood orb.
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I decided to write this much about her semblance so its clear how it works. Though I have to admit its somewhat complicated...


Combat Behavior:  Valentine is adept at long ranged combat. Her semblance allows her to stay rather far away from her enemies and still be a threat to them. In combat, she would stay at the backline and use the blood gathered beforehand, some of her own blood or pre-stored blood in the canisters she carries around to hurt enemies. She would focus on offense when she has distance between her and her enemy and would try to use the crystallised blood as a shield if she needs to block something that is going her way.
Paralysing her is impossible as it only affects the central nervous system but because she can control her own blood it also means that she can just make her limbs move while paralysed.

If an enemy comes close to her she switches to her dual whips to engage in close range combat.
She is capable of fighting in close combat with her whips but she prefers to use her semblance when her aura is still relatively healthy. Thanks to this she only uses her whips when the enemy gets close to her or if she is getting nowhere with using her semblance. If she runs out of blood or her aura is low she will use her whips instead to fight the enemy. She would keep her distance so she can attack the target from mid-range using Pain but if they get close she would use Ruin to fend them off. She could use the whip to disarm the enemy by coiling the whip around the weapon or wrist of the enemy and suddenly pulling, this would most likely result in sending the weapon flying or at least throwing the enemy off balance.

Her semblance costs Aura to use. This means that if an opponent can successfully deflect/destroy the blood attacks without taking less damage than what it costs Valentine to perform the attack then she will run out of Aura sooner than the opponent.
Disarming her or making the whips coil around something solid is an effective way to deal with her, assuming that the enemy will fight in melee range after of if the object is solid enough that the chainsaw wont cut through it easily. She is weak if her whip gets stuck as she would need to untangle them to continue using them. Valentine, due to the nature of her weapons, can't block or parry attacks, only partial parry if she manages to hit the enemy's weapon while they are swinging. She also lacks enough experience to fight with her weapons due to the amount of time she spent on training with her semblance, this means that she is in somewhat of a disadvantage against opponents who possess excellent skills with their weapons.

Pros:
-Really good at ranged combat.
-Has a lot of ways for dealing with enemies.
-Great offensive capabilities.
-Immunity to paralysing poisons and pain.
-Can disarm enemies relatively easily by using her whip if they don't anticipate it.
-Mostly Semblance reliant.

Cons:
-Struggles in close quarters as she can only rely on her chainsaw whip and she isn't that experienced in fighting with weapons.
-Semblance is taxing on her Aura.
-Low mobility when using her semblance, this makes her an easy target.
-Her weapons can be rendered useless for a significant duration if they get wrapped around an object.
-If her aura goes down she can't move.
-Can only partial parry attacks due to the nature of her weapons. Can't block attacks.

WEAPONS

Name: Pain & Ruin

Primary Form: A dark purple umbrella with crimson marks on it. The umbrella makes use of an ultra-light polymer layer that protects Valentine from the rain and sunlight.

Secondary Form: The umbrella can be split in half after closing it, the beams stack together and along with the handle they become flexible. Small blades extend from the weapons. The two parts each form a whip, one is a shorter one with a chainsaw mechanism and the other one is a longer one with a lot of blades.
The longer one is called Pain. It is a 3m long whip, not so good for close combat but a lot better for mid-range combat. Blades come out in every direction on the whip.
The shorter one is called Ruin. It is a 1.5m long weapon which makes it ideal for close ranged combat. It also has a chainsaw mechanism where the blades move up and down in a circular motion on the weapon.

Dust Functions: Pain can be infused with electric dust to have electrical attacks when hitting a target and Ruin can be infused with fire dust to make the moving blades lightly catch on fire.

History: She made this during her time at Signal Academy along with her canisters to protect her from the heat of the sun as well as to inflict pain and wounds on enemies. These whips were designed to tear up flesh so that she can have a ready supply of blood from her enemies.

GADGET

Name: Blood Canisters

Primary Form: A silver coloured canister that holds blood in it. She carries 3 canisters on her if she goes into a fight prepared. Otherwise she doesn't carry them.

History: She made this during her time at Signal Academy along with her weapon so she can have blood ready for her semblance.
« Last Edit: February 15, 2017, 10:54:41 AM by Malus Blanc »
Valentine Bloodfang - First Year Closet Cripple of Team SLVA - "How much edge could an edge lord lord if an edge lord could lord edge? Fufufu~"

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Re: Valentine Bloodfang
« Reply #1 on: February 14, 2017, 04:33:02 PM »
Bump...?
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Re: Valentine Bloodfang
« Reply #2 on: February 23, 2017, 01:50:14 PM »
Alright Malus...I'll go ahead and do your first review. I'll try to be nice while doing this, but I do apologize if I come off as cruel or mean:

Appearance:
So...she's completely paralyzed from the neck down and yet was still perfectly capable to get into Beacon Academy? Oh boy...this is going to be a VERY interesting review.....

History:
Here's where I address the whole paralyzed thing:
1. If she broke her neck due to falling down her staircase, then the shock and trauma and break her neck would be enough to kill her.
2. Even if she was not killed by the trauma (and let's just say she wasn't), the amount of damage your talking about (and say that she would be paralyzed by) would not simply be gone once she uses her semblance. Simply saying that she can manipulate her blood to make her body move would not necessarily apply to her neck in that, it is not a blood issue on why she can't move her neck, but rather a bone issue. Basically, the moment she tried to move her neck, she would risk breaking it again or cause more damage to her neck and spine.

Semblance:
Okay...this is the main reason why your character hasn't been reviewed yet as her semblance was under review with the other mods. To put it bluntly, I'm going to have to deny this semblance for a few reasons:
1. First and foremost, this semblance is SERIOUSLY WAAAAAAAAAY too OP, especially for a first year student.
2. Saying that, because she can blood bend (yes, this is what it is), she is now able to do all sorts of things like use blood as a weapon, restore her own blood by absorbing other blood without any side effects whatsoever, and have many of these abilities have no cost at all is OP and is denied.
3. Lastly, if she is still a novice at using her semblance, then how the heck is she able to manipulate her own limbs to the point that she is able to do well enough to get into Beacon Academy? That skill alone would require her to be at least proficient if not a master at using her semblance to that extent.

Look, I like the concept you're trying to go with, but this semblance is just way too OP, even with the strain and drawbacks, to allow to go through for a first year student. This is basically as bad as someone saying that, because I can manipulate lightning, that means I can do practically anything with it, even move at the speed of lightning (yes...I did review a character that thought this and they were denied).

Is blood manipulation possible? Sure, I think so. Is it possible with what you have written down right now? No, not at all. I suggest you review the semblance more and either drastically cut back on what it can do or just change the semblance altogether.

With all that said, I'm going to hold off on reviewing the rest so that you can address these major problems. Feel free to PM me if you have any questions.
First Year Beacon Student: Rackley Winchester - The Hawkeye Sniper of Team CRSA (Crystal)

Second Year Beacon Student: Jett Davenport - The Playful Shadow Knight of Team MLDC (Melodic)

Third Year Beacon Student: Suntalia Lyn Ryker - The Voice of Thunder of Team PLSM (Plasma)

Fourth Year Beacon Student: Savas Carnelian - The Quiet Berserker Leader of Team SARK (Stark)

Beacon Professor: Oberon Falcov - The Man With A Plan / Team Strategy Teacher of Beacon

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Re: Valentine Bloodfang
« Reply #3 on: March 19, 2017, 03:10:52 PM »
Moved to MIA as no changes have been made.
First Year Beacon Student: Rackley Winchester - The Hawkeye Sniper of Team CRSA (Crystal)

Second Year Beacon Student: Jett Davenport - The Playful Shadow Knight of Team MLDC (Melodic)

Third Year Beacon Student: Suntalia Lyn Ryker - The Voice of Thunder of Team PLSM (Plasma)

Fourth Year Beacon Student: Savas Carnelian - The Quiet Berserker Leader of Team SARK (Stark)

Beacon Professor: Oberon Falcov - The Man With A Plan / Team Strategy Teacher of Beacon