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Venus/Demi Eurydice
« on: December 22, 2016, 10:50:34 PM »

CHARACTER

Name:

 (Venus/Demi) Eurydice Knell)
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 Venus
Feral personality: ShowHide
 Demi
   

Age:
30

Species and Gender:

Chameleon Faunus, Female
Symbol:

Symbol: ShowHide

Occupation:
Ex Altesian Specialist, Assistant for Damien Knell , Absolute Agent of Chaos

Appearance:

Height: 4'11"
Weight: 120
Eurydice looks like a small child, due to a dysfunctional pituitary gland and the plant sinew restricting her growth she is stuck with a child-sized body. As a Chameleon Faunus her hair and skin changes color based on her emotional state, though she can control it when she decides to care about how she looks. Eurydice’s clothing style is completely random based on wh3at she happened to be doing before, she could be wearin rags from her literally planting herself in the ground for a week or she would be wearing the most expensive designer dress money could buy.
Eurydice has a childish freckled face with eyes that change color from red to green depending on the demeanor of her split personality. Her hair is a wavy rusty red, peeking through her hairline are a pair of wolf ears. Her overall size seems pudgy compared to her size, but apart from her face which is actually slightly chubby, she has a curiously extreme ratio of muscle for her size similar to that of a body builder. When emotional the sinew sometimes bulges to the surface creating a green veinlike pattern on her face and extremities. Other than that she looks like your average 13-year-old due to a mixture of a dysfunctional pituitary gland and the plant sinew that runs throughout her body that stunts her growth.

Eurydice has a childish freckled face with eyes that change color from red to green depending on the demeanor of her split personality. Her hair is a wavy rusty red, peeking through her hairline are a pair of wolf ears. Her overall size seems pudgy compared to her size, but apart from her face which is actually slightly chubby, she has a curiously extreme ratio of muscle for her size similar to that of a body builder. When emotional the sinew sometimes bulges to the surface creating a green veinlike pattern on her face and extremities. Other than that she looks like your average 13-year-old due to a mixture of a dysfunctional pituitary gland and the plant sinew that runs throughout her body that stunts her growth.

Eurydice’s face is the only part of her that looks, wrong. Her face ‘s expressions seem over the top as if she always enjoying the moment far too much and her mouth seems to be stretched to the side of her face  making her seem extremely sly and untrustworthy.


 

History:
TLDR: ShowHide
 
Lived in the forest with her mother
Mother died when she was young and she thrived in the woods on her own (with her semblance) till teenhood
Found by her rich Altesian father
Forcibly groomed and brainwashed into being the perfect pawn.
Went on a rampage and was sent to Atlas academy.
Graduated and was discharged later for her Instability
Now roams Remnant with her Half Brother being a shit disturber everywhere she goes

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The rustle of the treetop leaves and the sounds of echoing birds were all the things that Eurydice had ever known. The soft pound against the forest floor were the only things that could comfort her. She felt flaring instinct that flared and cracked like thunder in the sky. As if the world was at her beck and call and the only things that were important to her was her dominance over the forest. This was her life since she came into this world. This was her life living in the forest. Hunting and surviving was her passion and she was excellent at her profession. She was raised by the laws of nature. Kill or be killed, the wild had sharpened her already raised Faunus senses to the point where she knew the immense forest like the back of her hand.

 However one would ask oneself, who raised her? Someone had taught her to speak or interact. Eurydice had been alone for a long time and the recollection as to who her parents were or why they had left lived in a remote Atlesian forest. The reason why her and her mother were there had escaped her memory. The woman couldn't speak due to the wound through her throat, but she cared for her daughter as much as she could, and upon her back grew a plant when she grew ill she passed it onto her daughter putting the remainder of her aura into it and it crawled to life and latched onto young Eurydice.She should have followed soon after, die she would have, if not for a strange mixture of luck and fate. Eurydice was a special child. A child who had already unlocked her semblance at a young age. Fate was a funny thing, it had cursed Eurydice to be alone but had provided her with a semblance that took care of her and raised her. Eurydice’s semblance was Nature’s caretaker.

 This semblance allowed Eurydice to survive off of the life force of the forest itself. The first few years it was only by chance she survived. Her semblance would flow itself into the ground and made fruit grow whenever she wanted, It could control plants to fight for her.  It helped her instinctively know what was safe to eat and what was dangerous most. And when she was tired or hungry she could sustain off of the life force of the plants around her, but most importantly she could hide in the tallest of foliage and in the deepest of underground caverns away from the creatures of Grimm. The semblance was her guardian. Using the vitality she leached from the plants around her she stayed alive herself. Now as Eurydice grew, her dependence on her semblance faded and so she became a great hunter of the forest. And so her use of the semblance grew more refined. She used the forest and the plant latched to her back and manipulated the energy of the forest itself. It flowed in and out of Eurydice like a heartbeat and into the heart of the forest. Plants and the flora would protect her at a command like an heir to an earthen throne.  Eurydice was not stupid, she soon realized that the plants would reach out and nearly speak to her. Teaching her their ways and how to use her semblance properly. They spoke of hunters and what they had seen. Soon Eurydice came to fear the realm of other humans and stayed away mostly to the deeper parts of the forest. As the years past, Eurydice came to use her semblance fluidly. The flora would protect her when she was under attack forming a thick bramble of thorns and when she was hunting they would hunt with her. It took years for her to learn to use her semblance as that of a formidable warrior. It was in this state of harmony with herself and her semblance that tragedy struck.
 
Eurydice woke one morning to hear the screams of her plants. The cried out in anguish to her for help. She wondered if Grimm were rampaging but her worries were doubled when she saw smoke on the horizon. Humans were burning the forest. Racing through the maze of trees and thicket that had become her home. She knew what they were… they had come to dig up the crystals of energy that grew beneath the ground. They wanted to destroy her home for the dust but she would never allow them to destroy her home.

She rushed to defend her home. If there were one way to repay everything the forest had done for her she would do this. Arriving at the front lines of the fires she saw men in giant suits with fancy machine torching the place. Some with giant machines crushing the plants. It infuriated her, her instinct deep inside told her. This wasn’t right and that they had to be stopped at any cost. So she let her aura flow to all the plants in the area. Wincing at the pain she felt with them and she commanded as a tidal of thrones and roots uprooted the machines. The men scrambled scared, how pathetic… But some of them came closer reforming and coming closer to her. Before she could find a better vantage point she was quickly charged at by a few humans with strange mechanisms in their hands. She was quickly restrained but she controlled the plants around her to attack she soon felt lightheaded and passed out.
 
 
She woke up in a white room with three people in it. She was laying down in some weird fabric. She bolted up and looks around. Everything was strange. The walls, the floor, her bed, it was all so unnatural. Eurydice tried running but found herself cuffed to the bed. Thrashing a bit before settling. The helpless feeling of her captivity was sinking in. A man stood before her and walked to her and said.
“You may not understand a word I say but I hope you will understand this.” He gestured to the man in the corner “This is your father and now that we have found you I assure you we will try our best to rehabilitate you into society.”
The man’s smile reeked of something foul and although she couldn't understand the words she did understand one thing. It made her blood run cold and her thoughts stop in their tracks and as she realized, She was their captive.
 
Ushered through many concrete trees and fast moving machines Eurydice was transported. Stopping at a very big manor she stepped off the machine and were moved inside.  A tall man greeted Eurydice and embraced her along with a woman. No amount of instinct could prepare her so she stood there. Frozen with her heart aching, missing her home she walked into the prison that would consume her life.
 
Two years past of their so called rehabilitation. Eurydice was taught how to speak and interact with people. She was taught how to act appropriately and the history of Atlas. It bored her. She thrived on instinct and survival. Now she could act like a person but it would not change who she was at heart. She despised her parents for doing this to her. It pained her every moment she sat in a chair. Eurydice yearned to return to the forest. What had hurt her the most was the silence. When she arrived they placed an anklet around her ankle which dulled her senses. She couldn’t talk to her plants and she felt so empty. The world seemed monotone with the bracelet on it bored her, with the absence of the voices and instinct she could empathize but she couldn't bring herself to smile cry or laugh. All of her outward expressions and displays of emotion were dulled. The drowsy dullness was slowly killing her, like cancer gripping her primal thoughts and drowning them in the lessons of posture, grace, and honor.

Eurydice was trapped without hope. Her instinct had failed her and no amount of fighting was helping. That wasn’t to say she wouldn’t try. Every day she wore the anklet down and it was her dream to escape this life. One day, however, she was ushered into a room with the man that was her father. He smiled and Eurydice returned it with a cold glare the only defiant look left on her face. Many other men were there as well. The gazed at her constantly evaluating, she felt scared and less than a human and more like a specimen. It wasn’t too long before her father spoke.
 
“ Alright, then gentlemen it is now time to decide what is to become of my daughter. She is a woman who holds great potential. A person of many talents and I’m sure she could become an excellent member of society.”
 
Many suggestions were being thrown around faster than Eurydice could process. The room was whirling as shouts began to dominate her conscious. This continued until two things happened at once. A man shouted from the back “She would make a great wife! My boy would greatly enjoy someone like her!” and at that moment. After years of scratching and wearing her prison down without anyone noticing. Her anklet fell off. And she heard a voice primal and fierce. “Let me out… Let me hunt again” She could feel the plants voices but they were distant, and her instincts were still dulled. The voice spoke again “They dulled you… but... I can fight still. Let me take over.”

As Eurydice awoke from the black dream she had been in, she saw her captors in front of her. Her instinct, senses and her semblance had returned. Everything came to a dull roar as her anklet clattered against the ground. Eurydice felt once again the life force of the plants. She was disgusted at the men who stood before her. She was not an object to be sold. However, something was different. Over the years her other half had adopted civility, morals, and personality while she stayed passively in the back of her own mind watching and waiting.  It clashed violently like two tides until finally, the water settled. Returning back to reality the room had donned a silence as everyone was shocked from the visible amount of aura radiating from her, which seeped for her like a malicious cloud. Her steps were deliberate and lethal as she walked towards the crowded men. She had no plants to use in the room but Eurydice had remembered that this specific room was her favorite place in the manor. The palace gardens.  She simply smiled as the ceiling and floor collapsed as roots and vines ensnared the guests. Her power trashed and destroyed the walls as the group was subject to her power. One man stood amidst the chaos seemingly undisturbed. He quickly struck down her plants much to her dismay. He easily closed the distance between her and swiftly had her on the ground. When she regained her bearings the man helped her up. The men were slowly untangling themselves from the vines. Eurydice looked to the strange man as he spoke.

“ I came here because we were told that your father had discovered someone of great potential. He wasn’t wrong. I come here on behalf of the Atlesian Military academy willing to extend an offer of admission. You are obviously well versed in the use of aura in combat. I agree with you miss Eurydice. You were born to play the role of a fighter. So why don’t you pursue that path.” Many thoughts passed through her head as she processed this information. Specialists were bad, weren’t they? But anything would be better than being a pawn or a trophy. Fighting was already her passion and there could never be a better opportunity to grow.

 Taking his hand Eurydice stood up. Her father was fuming but the man put on a sly smile. s “Trust me sir, This exchange will work out for both of us, Her ‘Abilities are very interesting and her potential in the Atlesian military program is…unparalleled. And I'm sure the Altesian government will be willing to give you a more… tangible reward.  Me taking her off your hands is a blessing. Don’t misread that.” And so once again Eurydice was off to another place she had never been before. However this time she wasn’t as afraid. She felt somewhat whole yet broken at the same time as she was transported to the next chapter in her life. There was one thing that echoed through their mind as she marched up the steps to the Altesian academy. “I will never be prey again.”
 
Eurydice was known as a problem student during her time as an Altesian trainee. Although she thrived decently in academics and combat training. Her actions and behaviors were not optimal. She was easily irritable when not near plants, She showed extreme impulsiveness and also her behavior was erratic due to the indoctrination she had received. It was found that her semblance was such an integral part of her function that blocking it had actually caused a rift in her soul. This made her have seemingly two persona’s one with emotionless and scripted class. AND the other with savagery and rage that was nigh-uncontrollable in strategic scenarios. But where some saw problems other people saw an opportunity. Due to her lack of a ‘modern’  education, she was a blank slate of an individual and the teacher was soon scrambling to take advantage of this trying to mold her into the perfect soldier based on her strengths.

She had few acquaintances apart from some of the teachers and even fewer friends. The only one she had was a familiar boy named Damien. They were placed in the same group during their initiation. But there was an incident, some of the  Grimm had banded together into far larger pack than were expected and attacked the pair. Although Eurydice was able to use her semblance to escape and stay out of Grimm reach until help arrived, Damien went missing for many weeks and Eurydice was part of the search efforts. They sent airdrops and distributed emergency supplies all along the initiation area. Before long they declared him dead surely no one could survive half a month in this Grimm infected area. So it was to their surprise when he was recovered from the ruins three months later. Unfortunately, he was a nervous wreck and despite her consoling, he broke down and was institutionalized at  Golden Grove. She made sure to visit him all the time and soon found out that he was her half-brother and had been unable to escape after being at the brink of exhaustion from constant force training by their father and he was forced to use an archaic ancestral sword during his initiation. She became closer to him knowing that they both were wronged by the same person and vowed revenge for both of them, She made sure that she constantly visited him.

Even though Eurydice wasn't experienced as a person she was far from stupid and took advantage at of this. She made friend with the biology instructors and worked together with them to augment the plant that had long become a symbiotic part of her. Testing its limits and strengths.  A living plant that could change based on her needs It seemed it had leeched off her semblance until it had grafted itself to her skin and burrowed into her body.   As time went on went on and she began to become more emotionally stable and she began to specify her fighting style. She began to focus on hunting enemies, ambushes tracking and executions. She wanted to hunt prey as efficiently as possible and throughout her academy years, this is what she focused on getting weapons and skills specified for this purpose. As she became more proficient at her techniques she was frustrated with herself and the Altesian staff were too. Her semblance her greatest strength seemed to have been stunted. The whispers of the plants were quiet almost inaudible to her, and using her skills took far more aura then it didn't when she lived in the forest.

Upon graduation from the academy and joining military service she heard of a program that specialized in tracking down criminals and tracking deserters. She joined the military to qualify for this field and succeeded. And by god was she good at her job. By her hand, she took down Specialist deserters and extremely dangerous criminals. She modeled her entire fighting style around defeating her enemy without giving them a chance to rest. She set up intricate traps and baits with her semblance and broke through their aura to kill them in mere seconds.Her stunted growth had the boon of allowing her to catch her enemies off guard.

But it was this that slowly drove her superiors to question her. She started to spend longer and longer in the field, not returning for mission statements. Her social skills became tactless and it became clear that she was mentally disturbed. She was constantly talking to nothing in the field and she acted extremely erratic. Due to theses developments that grew gradually over time her Superiors declared her unfit for duty and discharged her from service. She soon disappeared from Atlas and now can be seen roaming Remnant with her Half brother Damien as arms dealers muscle.
 

Personalities:
Eurydice has different personalities caused by her constantly clashing feral and civil side. While being raised in the woods she was a predator with her only knowledge coming from her experience hunting and living wild. She was forced to adopt a civilized demeanor be her father. When she was being trained her instinct was repressed being forced to by an aura repressing anklet. When the anklet was suddenly removed her feral and civil side crashed and nearly broke her emotionally. To cope with this her brain did a last ditch attempt to save her from insanity. It divided the feral and civil side of her to almost two dissociative personalities.

The feral side (Venus) is childlike and playful, but extremely fierce in combat and has a severe lack of empathy for others. She only cares about things and people the interest her and has no feeling towards anyone else.
 The civil side is Mature and focused and passive (Demi).She acts cold and passive and conducts herself with extreme discipline.

Even though these two personalities are very different there are still some similarities. They both love to talk and don't fear speaking hard truths. They have a very little filter when it comes to politeness. All that can be said for sure is that Eurydice is an agent of chaos, she does whatever the hell she wants wherever the hell she wants.


Aura and Semblance:
Eurydice’s semblance is Nature’s gift. Nature’s gift gives her full control and perception of surrounding Flora. She is able to leech Vitality and nutrients out of the plants.

The first power of Nature’s gift is Gaia. Gaia allows Eurydice to sense and feel through the presence of plants inside a 150m radius. She can manipulate and ‘converse’ with the plants in a radius of 60 feet. Linked plants or plant roots can be felt and manipulated if they travel farther than her range. (example most of a forest or wooded area) She can manipulate outside of this passive zone but it becomes much more difficult the further they are away from her. She can cause rapid growth of these plants using their roots and vines as weapons and causing them to lash out and move at her will. The maximum that Eurydice can grow a plant depends on the type of plant. (A Tree wouldn't be able to be grown more than a few extra inches compared to an ivy which could be exponentially grown in size).  SHe has control to the extent of being able to burrow through the ground of wooded areas by moving and shifting roots and underground flora.

Eurydice can also absorb nutrition and vitality from nearby plants over time and convert it into vitality over time. Allowing her to slowly sustain her body over a long period of time. This also helps supplement the fact that she has an adult metabolism in a child-sized body. She must remain extremely still and f meditate during the aura drainage as she attempts to leech more energy then she expends by using her semblance. If interrupted before and after reaching a certain landmark of time chosen by EUrydice she  will loose grasp of all the gathered energy and immediately fall unconscious.

This allows her to stay alert and healthy and able to get back on her feet after a bad fight and survive in extremely harsh environments


Time to 100% Vitality: ShowHide

-Recovery from exhaustion (Just  tired) = 15 mins
-Recovery from absolute Exhaustion (Unable to move)= 45 mins
-3000 calories worth of nutrition= 1hour



Combat Behavior:
Eurydice is the definition of a situational powerhouse in the middle of combat. In a wooded setting, Eurydice can put out a large amount of damage while simultaneously able to protect herself from damage. Using her primary weapon Cela, Eurydice is able to strike hard at enemies with a strong offense to initiate a battle. Using her vines to tangle and disrupt enemies movement while she uses her small stature to weave between enemies and deal powerful blows.While defending she uses her spears to fend off anyone who decides to try and strike at the heart of her team. 

Though Eurydice is at her strongest when drawing people into an environment that either suite herself or that she has set up with traps to force her enemy to fight at a disadvantage.

While she is quite a versatile fighter, Eurydice possesses many weaknesses. She has next to no ranged abilities to fight with reliably. She is very sub susceptible to fire attacks as she struggles to heal a burning appendage. Damage to her controlled plants causes pain to her.

Strengths:
She knows the weak points of most animals and Grimm, She’s a skilled Tracker who is knowledgeable in botany and categorizing and understanding animal behavior. She is extremely Skilled at Mid and Short range combat with her semblance and spears.
Plants can soak up a lot of damage
-She is able to survive much life threatening scenarios due to her semblance
-Cela is buoyant
-Extremely good at ambushes
-Very mobile and flexible

Weaknesses:

-Eurydice feels Cela's and any other plant she controls as pain along with bonded plants.
-The first Fire Attacks done to Eurydice in a fight can frighten her
-Fire attacks done to Cela will damage it extensively.
-Weak at long ranged combat

WEAPONS

Name:
Cela
Primary Weapon:

Cela is a rock hard vine-like plant which constantly feeds off of Eurydice’s aura(due to her semblance to the point of it being affixed to her body. Due to the length of time it has been attached to Eurydice It now drains Virtually no aura to move or attack with it, although manipulating Cela’s size or regenerating Cela will cause aura drain. Eurydice can instantly supplement 25% of her aura per day using Cela. (This is usually a last resort as it make Cela unusable for at least an hour.

Cela has about 6 vines in its normal state usually coiled around Eurydice’s body but sometimes they'll be sticking out of her clothes and used like appendages. (Eurydice can make Cela make more vines.) Cela’s normal thickness is about that of a golf ball but it can grow up to the thickness of a fist if need be. If Eurydice becomes unconscious Cela will instinctively wrap around her cocooning her.

In an idle form Cela passively sits there waiting to be called upon for combat sometimes passively branching out small vines that Eurydice sometimes uses as appendages. When Eurydice floods Cela with her aura is when the weapon truly comes to life. Able to grow at a rapid rate the plant has vines which can sprout vines which Eurydice can use to flay her opponents by flinging them at high speeds.

However, Eurydice has more then attack functions for her main weapon. She can soften the thorns on her vines and make them curl around her armor forming a protective barrier around her body.

 Whenever Cela is damaged not only does Eurydice feel the pain but has to put aura in to regrow the lost limb.


History:
Cela was given to Eurydice by her mother who had the same Semblance as her and was modified by Eurydice in the academy with multiple long nights staying in the biology lab. Cela is the perfect weapon for Eurydice combat style and the perfect companion, A friend who would never leave her side...

Secondary Function
Seedling
Explanation:

Cela can produce a spray of small seeds that can be controlled be Eurydice within a 30 feet radius.They can also be sensed by Eurydice within a  mile radius They can be used to tangle people, track their movement, or (with enough of them) can grow through people's bodies to harm them. They are small mossy ivy-like plants and are extremely tiny with the maximum thickness of a pencil. Because of this, they grow quickly in length with minimal amounts of effort needed to make them grow exponentially.

Secondary Weapon:
Spears

Explanation:

Eurydice has 19 small cylinders on her waist that can unfold into very simple spears to be used as either javelin or melee weapons she has: 6 kinetic, 6 Ice, 6 Lightning, and one made specifically which has a serrated edge and has air dust engraved throughout it. Which she affectionately calls her “Slicey stick”





















« Last Edit: January 14, 2017, 08:35:34 PM by terexia »

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Re: Venus/Demi Eurydice
« Reply #1 on: January 05, 2017, 06:27:59 PM »
Sorry for being extremely late, had a few issues I had to deal with.

I recall seeing this on the preboot forum. Is this an exact transfer, or are there any changes? If so, list the changes.
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Re: Venus/Demi Eurydice
« Reply #2 on: January 06, 2017, 05:18:32 AM »
This is a complete and utter rework of the character,  judge this as standalone please.  ;D

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Re: Venus/Demi Eurydice
« Reply #3 on: January 10, 2017, 01:48:01 PM »
Alright, let's begin shall we?

History: There are a few issues that I see here. One, you mentioned them living in the forest, with your character living there until their teenage years. I'm assuming that it implies that she would be living in Grimm territory, which makes it hard for me to believe that she survived that long with no combat experience whatsoever, especially in what is presumably Atlas territory. Second, I'm pretty sure that it's not possibly to have someone transfer their aura to a plant (which in itself already has aura) to the point where it can move and latch onto someone, unless it's a semblance strictly based around transferring aura (which might not even be possible in the first place). Even then, the aura transfer would soon wear off since, y'know, they're dead.


“For the years I’ve stayed her I feel like everywhere I went I was hunted. Always being watched and observed. Ordered what to do like a slave. Now you will know what it is like to be PREY!!!” These were the last word before all hell broke loose.
 

I'm assuming that this was said out loud, which would lead to my next point. I'd find it hard for a military recruiter, desperate or no, to allow someone that showed the smallest sign of emotional instability into their academy.

Aura and Semblance: I'd suggest toning the range down to between 120-130 meters. Second, the absorption of vitality and nutrients contradicts with the fatigue system in place for semblances. It would make it harder to recover from exhaustion since using your semblance would make you exhausted in the first place.

Overall, the character seems good enough for me, and the only main issues was history and semblance.
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Re: Venus/Demi Eurydice
« Reply #4 on: January 14, 2017, 08:46:53 PM »
-Changed Appearance and type of Faunus. (Because I didn't know that my idea for her would be conically allowed.)

Eurydice looks like a small child, due to a dysfunctional pituitary gland and the plant sinew restricting her growth she is stuck with a child-sized body. As a Chameleon Faunus, her hair and skin change color based on her emotional state, though she can control it when she decides to care about how she looks. Eurydice’s clothing style is completely random based on wh3at she happened to be doing before, she could be wearing rags from her literally planting herself in the ground for a week or she would be wearing the most expensive designer dress money could buy.
Eurydice has a childish freckled face with eyes that change color from red to green depending on the demeanor of her split personality. Her hair is a wavy rusty red, peeking through her hairline are a pair of wolf ears. Her overall size seems pudgy compared to her size, but apart from her face which is actually slightly chubby, she has a curiously extreme ratio of muscle for her size similar to that of a body builder. When emotional the sinew sometimes bulges to the surface creating a green veinlike pattern on her face and extremities. Other than that she looks like your average 13-year-old due to a mixture of a dysfunctional pituitary gland and the plant sinew that runs throughout her body that stunts her growth.


- (changed) Explained how she could possibly survive in a forest infested by Grimm, By hiding mostly.

 This semblance allowed Eurydice to survive off of the life force of the forest itself. The first few years it was only by chance she survived. Her semblance would flow itself into the ground and made fruit grow whenever she wanted, It could control plants to fight for her.  It helped her instinctively know what was safe to eat and what was dangerous most. And when she was tired or hungry she could sustain off of the life force of the plants around her, but most importantly she could hide in the tallest of foliage and in the deepest of underground caverns away from the creatures of Grimm. The semblance was her guardian. Using the vitality she leached from the plants around her she stayed alive herself.

-(Changed) Added limiter to vitality regen, TLDR if she gets talked to, startled if anything at all catches her attention during her meditation when she must be sitting still she immediately loses all her vitality and fall unconscious regardless of how she was before she started meditating. Plus I added more time to gain vitality back.

. She must remain extremely still and  meditate during the aura drainage as she attempts to leech more energy then she expends by using her semblance. If interrupted before and after reaching a certain landmark of time chosen by Eurydice she will loose grasp of all the gathered energy and immediately fall unconscious.

This allows her to stay alert and healthy and able to get back on her feet after a bad fight and survive in extremely harsh environments


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-Recovery from exhaustion (Just  tired) = 15 mins
-Recovery from absolute Exhaustion (Unable to move)= 45 mins
-3000 calories worth of nutrition= 1hour



-Removed screaming rant, I assumed that she would seem more like an impoverished child and a blank slate. Also, her instability didn't show that much until she spent large amounts of time in the field as a full specialist.

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Re: Venus/Demi Eurydice
« Reply #5 on: January 19, 2017, 07:40:44 PM »
I'm taking over this review since NotSurprised is 'busy' as usual.

Now I'll start from scratch, because rereading is soooo fun.

Name
She has several names. I doubt other people use them so I assume she just calls them this herself. Split personality and all.

Occupation
Absolute agent of chaos? Seriously? Unless she has a good reason why she's this 'absolute' meaning completely chaos stricken fanatic, I advise you to change that. Also it's not a real occupation in the first place. Unless there's this group of chuunibyou adults who name themselves as such and get paid to do so.

Appearance.

You mention plant sinew? I don't know what to do about that at the moment but plants in her body restricting growth? That's a little too farfetched even for rwbyverse standards. She's both a faunus and...Florus??? now? Depending on how far this goes I may have to ask you to remove the plant body symbiote thingy.

History.

This sounds a little farfetched in that she and her mother lived in the forest alone for god knows how many years without grimm overwhelming them. Sure you could say they were pros at survival but having a little kid to watch over as well as hordes of man eating monsters at every turn I doubt this would be a feasible and believable scenario. You also mention that she lived ALONE of all things using her poison ivy powers to live. I'd have to say no to that. If I need to add a reason it's the same as the latter, except she's now a little girl alone in the forest with super plant powers.

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The woman couldn't speak due to the wound through her throat, but she cared for her daughter as much as she could, and upon her back grew a plant when she grew ill she passed it onto her daughter putting the remainder of her aura into it and it crawled to life and latched onto young Eurydice.

Plants can't work like that. even if you say aura(MAGIC!!!!) helped it probably won't sustain the plant. No matter what plant it is. Plant physiology is vastly different to a humans. A FUNGUS HOWEVER isn't. But fungi are parasites. Still more realistic though, just super stupid and impractical not to mention disgusting.

Next part states she's been living alone with her semblance to aid her. So a little girl, probably scared witless without other people, in a forest filled with grimm. End result would probably be her getting mauled to death. Negative emotions attract grimm. She was probably a scared, constantly hungry,cold,lonely etc etc etc and that would attract a tonne of them. This is why it's unbelievable. Not to mention her semblance would have such a tiny limit at such a young age and she wouldn't know how to survive without it since she was taught nothing by her dead mom.

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Eurydice was not stupid, she soon realized that the plants would reach out and nearly speak to her.

Plants have no way to know if they're conscious or not. They posses no nervous structures and follow a predetermined set of commands given by their genes etc etc etc. They WOULD NOT be able to communicate with animals, let alone people, in a way that would let them talk to her. Not to mention plants would probably be stupid af otherwise they wouldn't let themselves be slaughtered on a regular basis by animals.

The rest of the history sounds like something out of a random comic book with a special plant girl as the protagonist. That's not bad, except you're manipulation aspects of the current world to be able to fit with it. Talking plants. Girl talking back to plants. Girl using talking plants to survive and be a friggin god of the forest only to go on a rampage and faint, be taken in, and somehow find out her father is still there but never bothered to look for his family cuz he was doing god knows what the hell it was he needed to do.

No. I won't accept this. Retconn entire history. This is practically mary sue territory already. Super powered girl gets found by powerful father and turns into a special soldier of the military. Ugh.

Personality.
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All that can be said for sure is that Eurydice is an agent of chaos, she does whatever the hell she wants wherever the hell she wants.

So much for rehabilitation.

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Eurydice’s semblance is Nature’s gift. Nature’s gift gives her full control and perception of surrounding Flora. She is able to leech Vitality and nutrients out of the plants.

She can both control, talk, and perceive and heal from plants. That is Waaaaaaaaaaaay too much for a semblance. Almost 5 powers worth. Pick mere control and perception. No friggin leeching vitality magically unless that's her only power and no goddamned talking to plants. Unless she's also a psychotic and not just multiple personality disordered.



I suggest you make the rest of the profile fit in with the new edits you make in the future. As it is now I can't accept this profile nor would I approve such a farfetched idea. Sure you may argue that it's RWBYVERSE and we don't know everything about it but we're using the current canon with some minor revisions here and there as a baseline and there's nothing about talking plants and children with enough power to survive years in a forest alone when even whole communities disappear overnight.












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Re: Venus/Demi Eurydice
« Reply #6 on: February 06, 2017, 10:11:32 AM »
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