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Eleanor Etoile
« on: April 13, 2018, 05:17:28 PM »
CHARACTER

Name: Eleanor Etoile

Theme: Two Steps From Hell - Enchantress

Age: 19

Species and Gender: Human - Female

Occupation: Beacon 4th Year

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Personality: Really kind person who loves all of existence despite its dark sides and is greatly connected to the world. A natural teacher and commander who inspires people, Eleanor is able to turn scared, panicking civilians into an organized phalanx within mere minutes. Aspires to join the Council of Remnant after becoming a huntress.

Aura and Semblance: Color: Neutron Star Blue
Semblance: Eleanorís semblance allows her to generate destructive blue energies and manipulate it to a high degree. Things she can do include:
  • Emitting energy blades from her palms
  • Rapid-firing bolts from her hands powerful enough to rival an average heavy machine-gun
  • Firing a powerful beam out of her hands after a brief charge time.
  • Diffusing it throughout all of her aura to create reactive armor.
  • Exploding it out in an area of effect around her.
  • Packing it and sending it upwards, before it fires a series of beams downwards, bombarding a an area of effect below
After years of frequent use and training, Eleanor has a massive aura capacity and can fire her bolts for a little more than an hour with only brief pauses in between.

Combat Behavior: While she generally tries to avoid combat, Eleanor primarily utilizes her semblance and aura when fighting, mostly using the bolts from her semblance. Rivaling a M2 heavy machine-gun, each bolt is quite powerful, fired at a rate of 10 per second, and there's no gunshot, only a hum as it flies through the air. On top of that, Eleanor can use it while running around normally at the mode speed of huntresses her age, but with formidable stamina from daily morning jogs. She can also resize the bolt's power for other situations, such as if she needed to make them nonlethal. If she needs to make them more lethal, she stores it up, then fires it out as a beam.

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« Last Edit: April 14, 2018, 07:58:33 PM by Inexhaustive »
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Re: Eleanor Etoile
« Reply #1 on: April 14, 2018, 01:30:55 AM »
I would highly advise against both using highly destructive materials like anti matter or science based semblances without a comprehensive understanding to the topic and considering you've written 'AM beam' in the profile I severely doubt the later.
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Re: Eleanor Etoile
« Reply #2 on: April 14, 2018, 02:34:43 AM »
Okay, how this semblance is written is still kind of WIP but I really want to do this so please hear me out:

First, yes AM is highly destructive, but thatís why Eleanor only generates very little amounts. Like her full, highly-trained aura generates hundred-trillionths (1/100000000000) of a gram. Enough to consistently use as a formidable weapon, but not enough to be unbalanced for a fourth year on the site. So keep that in mind. I donít know how much would be unbalanced on the site so I put down what I have now, but mods like you can teach me how to adjust it.

As for the AM Beam part, I believe we have a misunderstanding. Itís not a beam of AM, itís more of a beam of aura that contains and prevents the minuscule amounts of AM in it from touching any matter until it hits the target.
« Last Edit: April 14, 2018, 03:01:29 AM by Inexhaustive »
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Re: Eleanor Etoile
« Reply #3 on: April 14, 2018, 05:41:20 AM »
Btw, you can't have a semblance which spontaneously generates matter. Or antimatter. You can say "highly destructive and/or reactive Aura packets" but I highly recommend not going with matter generation of any kind.
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Re: Eleanor Etoile
« Reply #4 on: April 14, 2018, 05:57:43 AM »
But the thing is, sure you can say "highly destructive and/or reactive Aura packets" but I'm not just looking for an excuse to go pew pew, if I wanted to do that I would have done so. In fact, I did so until I changed it to antimatter because it's antimatter and the effect of it being antimatter, even if it only makes her just as strong as any other character, is what makes the semblance really special. Basically, I don't wish to take the easy route and just get out an approval, I'd rather take the hard, long route and end up with a character worth using.

As a final note, nobody said anything about spontaneous generation, I only mentioned generation on there. You do reserve the right to perceive it however you like though.
« Last Edit: April 14, 2018, 06:18:30 AM by Inexhaustive »
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Re: Eleanor Etoile
« Reply #5 on: April 14, 2018, 06:23:16 AM »
I believe what Nathan was meaning that the simple act of creation is a significant power let alone creating as devastating a substance as anti-matter.

But sure I'll give you a chance to explain yourself, how do the qualities of anti matter, specifically positron antimatter, serve in creating a reactive armour?

I would also recommend doing more reading on anti-matter as sure a 'hundred-trillionth' may kill someone in our world but generates a miniscule amount of energy. Like lightbulb level not laser beam level. Antimatter is powerful but a trillionth is a very small fraction.
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Re: Eleanor Etoile
« Reply #6 on: April 14, 2018, 06:43:00 AM »
I took out the positron part, not even entirely sure why I put it there. How the reactive armor works is that antimatter is diffused throughout her aura, still stored and contained using similar methods. When something like a sword hits her aura, some of the AM gets exposed and annihalates, dealing equal damage to both of them, but that's still better than just them dealing damage to her.

My bad, I've misplaced a few zeroes in my calcs. I hope we don't have to go into that detail, so may I just say that the total energy resulting from the antimatter generated by her full aura capacity is around the total impact energy of bullets from a heavy machine-gun firing for a little more than an hour?

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« Last Edit: April 14, 2018, 06:57:31 AM by Inexhaustive »
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Re: Eleanor Etoile
« Reply #7 on: April 14, 2018, 06:59:23 AM »
  • Banned Semblance Abilities: These are general concepts that are not allowed for characters.
    • Creation Powers. You cannot create a hammer made out of a physical matter. You can create a hammer made out of Aura, which would dissipate when you let go of it or ran out of Aura.

Just a reminder.
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Anna Fall, Insightful Visionary of Team ASTC
Brock Greenwood, Human Titan of Team HTDG
Helena Chlophyll, Ray of Sunshine of Team CHES
Scarlett/Corinth,Korynn,etc. Briggart/Topaz (In the works)
Max (mp)
Chloe (mp)
Maena Nadir, Coherent Beam of Team SSMR
Europa/Encela(dus)/Io/Callisto/Calypso (In the works)
Hannah Glass
Mark Cassini
Carlson Ferram
"Definitely not Johnny"
"Some goddamn bullshit, Invictus Omega"
"The Ferryman"
"GREEEEEEEN"
"I swear it's not my fault"
"HOT HOT HOT"
"s m o l"
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Re: Eleanor Etoile
« Reply #8 on: April 15, 2018, 01:29:33 PM »
Can someone delete this real quick? I've decided to take this character out of the works for the time being.
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