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Approved Characters / Re: Tieren Augus
« on: December 17, 2018, 10:30:35 PM »
Edits approved

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Approved Characters / Re: Attom Goldwyn
« on: December 13, 2018, 03:57:05 PM »
Had a minor formatting tip over discord, other than that character and profile are great, and I don't have anything to comment on.

2/2, approved and moved.

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Approved Characters / Re: Kisha Miles
« on: December 13, 2018, 08:10:03 AM »
Ahh missed that in my re-read, my bad.

And all good, edits approved.

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Approved Characters / Re: Azure Blair
« on: December 12, 2018, 02:21:36 PM »
Hi Azure, first off I'm terribly sorry for how long this has been in editing.

Core + Rock and Roll are fine, edits approved.


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Approved Characters / Re: Kisha Miles
« on: December 12, 2018, 02:16:22 PM »
First off terribly sorry for how long this has been in editing, trying to make some changes to avoid this in the future.

Voice reference is a new one but totally fine

All the grammar fixes and such are fine.

For the dust types, the only concern here is if you end up using nothing but them and spam them too much. But so long as you are reasonable with them it should be fine. (To be clear I don't want any edits here, really don't care for any numbers or anything just a comment on how you should try to play it)

Lastly the semblance, I'm afraid I don't think I can approve that. That kind of "advanced usage" of the semblance could be possible in a graduate but seems too much for a first year. From a site balancing perspective, this is already a unique and powerful semblance so it would be unfair to those who have speed semblances to just clip it on here as a bonus.

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Approved Characters / Re: Patrick Iris
« on: December 12, 2018, 01:39:47 PM »
A template with some slight alterations though that is perfectly fine.

Interesting semblance, since the effect is kept minor I think it can work perfectly fine. Only caveat I have is that you should describe its effect to the other users in a thread, it will be up to them how they want to interact with it (As they still maintain full control of their character, you can't tell them how their character would feel in a moment).

2/2, moved. 

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Beacon Academy / Re: A Lunch Side Chat [DGTL]
« on: December 09, 2018, 11:04:42 AM »
Giving a small smile back to Janna she simply responded "That could be nice, but yeah, don't expect me to eat like you two."

As the conversation moved to strategy Diana really wanted to just defer entirely to Zaffre as she really was the expert, but figured she should say something at least since she was supposed to be leading. Absentmindedly she shook her head in bewilderment wondering, for what felt like the hundredth time, why she was chosen to lead.

"I do really appreciate you looking out for us Janna but you are an amazing fighter, and you should fight to your strengths. Besides Iím pretty agile, I can avoid most of the trouble that comes my way." she said whilst making sure not to rub her ankle as she had been for most of the conversation.

She looked from Brock to Zaffre as they talked about his ranged capabilities but didnít really have anything to add, the sniper like rounds she used would certainly not work with his weapon. She did pick up on the change to Zaffre as she mentioned her dad, Diana looked on with eyes that were partially piercing with curiosity but were mostly caring with empathy. She desperately wanted to be there for her with whatever it was, but knew better than to force it. She made a mental note to ask Zaffre if there was anything she would like to talk about when the two were alone at some point.

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Everywhere Else / Re: Movie Night [Closed]
« on: December 08, 2018, 04:38:49 PM »
Whilst, in reality, the pause before the response was tiny Diana's overly neurotic brain found plenty of time to twist it negatively and was desperately looking for a good way to escape. All of that was alleviated when Helena responded with what could only be described as blinding positivity. "Thank you" Diana responded trying her best to hide her internal thoughts and seem friendly whilst sitting down next to her. "Oh, Iíve looked at a few of those too. Some of them are just horrifying."

The holoscreen had barely been turned on before a third voice joined in, after Helena had spoken Diana figured she could handle the introductions. "Hi. Iím Diana, this is Helena, weíre both from Beacon. How about you?"

Once introductions were done she looked back to Helena and couldn't shake the feeling her necklace had just moved, absentmindedly she leaned in slightly to get a closer look.

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Character Creation / Re: +1'd Characters
« on: December 04, 2018, 07:24:34 PM »
"I am the Dustman" (Enter Dustman is better. King edit) https://rwbyfanon.com/index.php?topic=1528.0

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Everywhere Else / Re: Movie Night [Closed]
« on: December 03, 2018, 05:46:52 AM »
Fights between people, even just for training purposes had always made Diana nervous so she avoided most of the tournament, only watching the ones that involved her team or close friends. For her, the main draw for the tournament was that it was taking place in Atlas, it was a free trip back home to spend some time with her family.

Compared to most people around her she seemed to have dressed with little regard to the outside weather, especially for someone who was close to just skin and bone. Wearing a simple sleeveless purple dress with seemingly only leggings to help against the cold. For someone who grew up poor in Mantle her baseline was certainly lower than most, however the main thing that kept her warm was a piece of raw fire dust that she wore as a glamour on a white choker. She had also hidden her weapon in a duffle bag she carried.

As she returned to the common area of Amity from a quick meal with her brother she got out her scroll to send a quick message to her teammates to let them know that she was back, seeing as they wouldn't be done for at least an hour or two she decided to wander until she found someone she recognized.

Finally she spotted someone she was familiar with at least, although they hadn't talked much directly they certainly had things in common so now was as good a time as ever. "Umm, excuse me Helena? Not sure if you remember me, I'm Diana from Dr. Sophos' practical medicine class, mind if I join you?"

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Approved Characters / Re: Lunae Terenas
« on: December 02, 2018, 05:12:32 PM »
Edits approved.

Noting the minor comment from discord, that the character will be exhausted if stamina reaches 0 as well (Keeping it mechanically similar to aura to avoid complicating the balance).

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Approved Characters / Re: Dustsmith, Mistral based Villian
« on: December 01, 2018, 07:15:15 PM »
The only concern I have is the degree to which this character is a well-known story which won't be the case for the players in any thread he features in. "The stories surrounding the Dustsmith are some of the oldest in Mistral if not all of Remnant." "hero-worshipped the Dustsmith". Personally, I would maybe tone that down a bit, some known legends that he inspired. Then again it is a villain and I do think you have earned that trust so a +1 from me.





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Introductions, birthdays, and departures. / Re: Yo.
« on: December 01, 2018, 02:54:44 PM »
First off welcome to the site Sy! However Reaper is entirely correct in that we really don't do canon characters here I'm afraid, even OC's that are semi-clones of the cast don't get approved. You are certainly welcome to try your hand at creating a character, but if you just like to use canon ones then I would honestly recommend looking on a few of the other sites that do RWBY RP. I know there are some others out there but can't say I remember any of their names.

Best of luck with the character or finding a site that's a better fit ^^


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Plot Zone / Re: Who would be interested in a Beacon thread?
« on: December 01, 2018, 02:35:54 AM »
Awesome, four is probably a good number. I'll add you all as friends on discord and set up a group chat

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Plot Zone / Who would be interested in a Beacon thread?
« on: November 30, 2018, 04:03:20 AM »
At the moment my threads have been rather quiet and I would like to get to post a bit more than 2-3 times a month so figured it was time to find a new thread to join. I don't have any specific ideas in mind (its always been one of my weaknesses) but figured if there were some people interested we could brainstorm a bit over on discord, or it could just be another casual social thread to get to know the other characters on site (I like those but not sure if everyone else does).

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