Alright. I've been let loose on this profile. I'm usually somewhat nice. But the mixture of having to deal with edgelord after edglord has left me with a very short patience. And you just happened to be the final straw.
Age: 17
Occupation: 1st year student Shade Academy, Assassin-for-Hire
Another killing prodigy. This one isn't even old enough to vote! Starting off strong this time!
Greyson was born very strangely as he grew up throughout the years his hair was always white and spiky with black frosted tips which was recommended by a friend. He has fox ears that are a deep black color but his left ear has a small cut on the side of it. His skin is a tanned white color and his eyes are a deep blueish-green color.He is about 6,1 and weighs 154 lbs.
Alright. First off. How the hell are his ears black while his hair is white. If it was dyed I could understand. but naturally? That isn't the way hair works. Secondly. 155 is near underweight for a 6'1 active male. Especially one that is apparently surrounded by fighting such as yours. I know its RWBY but look at the characters that show skin. They all have defined musculature that easily adds weight. You dude would be a twig at that weight and size. The clothing itself is fine...if not stereotypical. But whatever. Now lets move onto the history
Greyson was born and raised in a small town that was inhabited by assassins that was made up of 2 clans the Yin clan and the Blaze clan. They built their town in a uncharted area in Vacuo and would often be visited by shady characters looking for business
The first god damn paragraph and I already have to start dissecting. Let me make this as clear as possible.Not just to you. But to every person on the god damn planet. You ready? This is going to be really important so listen closely.
ASSASSINS.
ARE.
SECRETIVE. This is not goddamn Orlais where killing and backstabbing is a common occurrence! RWBY is a series in which people struggle to survive against a neverending onslaught of evil monsters hellbent on killing everyone. Yes the dark underbelly exists. Yes assassins would be in demand. But a village of hired killers would last half a year at most. This is not Dragon Age. This is not Tokyo Ghoul. This is not fucking Naruto. A massive hive of evil characters would be hunted down the moment even a hint of their existence leaks. As much as everyone loves to jack off to Agane Ga Kill and Hitman. Assassins are terrible people. Anyone who kills non combatants for money is automatically labeled as a traitor to humanity by everyone else who exists. The entire existence of this village would go be a threat to every single hired killer who lived there. It just paints a giant fucking target on them.
Also. Clan Blaze. CLAN! BLAZE!
Do you understand how clan's work? It's not just some random title!
IT'S THE FUCKING NAME OF THE FAMILY! "Hello my friend! What is your name?"
"Why it's Kenneth Blaze! Of the Blaze clan!"
See how absolutely fucking ridiculous this sounds? God fucking damnit this is just the start as well.
He lived there for about 15 years where he went through harsh training by his father who happened to be the yin clan leader at the time to become an assassin like his ancestors before him you could say that it's almost like a family business handed down for generations they would often be called The Guilty Shadows. There had always been a law called "11+" which said by the age of 11 you could be hired to do assassinations but Greyson had always refused and didn't begin doing his part until he was 14.
Okay. I don't know if English is your first language or not, but reading this actually gave me a headache. For the love of god, and my own personal sanity. Use a grammar check. There are free ones all over.
So once again let's split this apart. I'm not even going to try to explain why "The Guilty Shadows" is a terrible choice of name. You figure that out. The more important question is why the hell didn't he start killing until he was 14?! He has shown no inclination that he has a moral compass that goes against killing people. So why is he now suddenly against it?! Also most people don't even start combat school until they are at least high school age, yet this clan has their kids killing at age 11?
Yeah how about no.
After he turned 16 his town was invaded by a horrible grimm attack which caused the death of his father who had grown old and weary and unable to fight seeing him beheaded in front of his eyes by an unusual looking Beowulf causing him to go into a furious rampage making him seem as if he were a ballistic monster the grimm just took the expression of rage on his face as an insult and tried attacking him, before the creature could hit Greyson was already behind the monster and had brutally killed it he then took his anger out on most of the other grimm throughout his hometown which also caused him to do excessive area damage forcing everyone else alive in the town to evacuate along with his mother and some of the grimm who never bothered to attack the runaway citizens due to the fear they saw towards him.
No Seriously. What? Between the never ending sentences and poor grammar I am actually having a hard time deciphering what the fuck is going on here. From what I understand here is that Mr. Master Assassin suddenly cannot fight anymore, even though he was good enough to train all the children apparently. And then of course we can't forget the one thing that an edgelord can't live without.
DEAD PARENTS!Congratulations! You now get to join the millions just like you who use the death of an important character as nothing more than a cheap emotional stage prop to be thrown away for a shitty emotional plot point!
Oh my! It seems you've gotten another mark on your overused cliches reward card! Well let me tick off the inexplicable berserk rage. Your only one away from- wait. Is that? Could it be?!
You've done it! You even managed to cram in the destruction of your home town in on top of everything else! My god this isn't even halfway over is it?
After he had done the damage he caused he walked through the town slowly but started to fill up with shame. He began regretting what he did the more he walked through his town, he then came across his house only to see that it had been reduced to rubble and there was his father lying on the ground... headless. After a near hour of looking around he noticed that the citizens were starting to return but they looked at him as if he were a monster including his mother because of his rampage and desire to kill off every grimm in his way. When he tried explaining everything the words wouldn't or couldn't leave his mouth and he then ran off and wandered the deserts of Vacuo and made a name for himself "The Monster of Assassination" he went from town to town doing many assassinations and would even take out specific grimm people would give him
Wait. After everything. They turn their back on him? After he went out of his way to save their lives from the giant human eating Grimm?!
WHY! WHY WOULD THEY THINK HE IS A MONSTER FOR TRYING TO KILL THE ACTUAL MONSTERS THAT JUST KILLED A TON OF PEOPLE IN THE VILLAGE?! IT'S SO GOD DAMN STUPID! IF ANYTHING THEY SHOULD BE PRAISING HIM FOR BEING SO GOD DAMN STRONG EVEN BEFORE HIS BALLS HAVE FULLY DROPPED! THIS LITERALLY ONLY EXISTS SO HE HAS EVEN MORE REASON TO ANGST AND GO ON HIS JOURNEY TO BE AN OH SO EDGY BADASS!
One day he was hired by an anonymous person to assassinate someone who the anonymous person had quarreled with. When Greyson arrived to the location he was given only to find the headmaster of Shade Academy who was wearing a cloak that hid his identity and offered him a place into his school.
NO! JUST BECAUSE THE NAME OF THE ACADEMY IS SHADE DOES NOT MEAN THEY ARE SOME EVIL SLYTHERIN ORGANIZATION! THE HEADMASTER WOULD NOT SEEK OUT SOME FREAK WHO IS ACTUALLY CALLED THE MONSTER OF ASSASSINATION AND ASK HIM TO JOIN THE SCHOOL! THIS IS IT! I AM DONE! I WON'T EVEN TOUCH YOUR LACK OF PERSONALITY OR YOUR STUPID STANDARD ASS KATANA!
SEIG OUT
BY THE POWER INVESTED IN ME BY THE GREAT DICK KNOWN AS VOX, I BAN THIS CHARACTER FROM EVER BEING APPROVED
You lack the authority. Know your fucking place.
Nothing is beyond redemption. Not even this mess. -Vox
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