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The Vale Region / Re: Frostbite [Closed]
« on: May 18, 2018, 12:10:30 PM »
Following behind Nicolas and Aurelia silently, Savas merely took in the scenery of his hometown. Despite the dreary weather, the town buzzed with activity from shops opening up to showcase their wares to a few small children running down the pavement, laughing as they went along. Here and there, he caught a few gazes on him, though many of them merely nodded their head in acknowledgement of the giant faunus, to which he nodded back politely.

Arriving at the outdoor arena, Savas took a moment to get himself prepared for a fight. Walking over to the other side of the arena from Nicolas, he smirked slightly as he saw the faint glimmering around Nicolas. "Ngggrh...guess we're not holding back" he remarked, also activating his semblance. As he began to glow a dark crimson, he closed his eyes and let the faint picture of his team flash before his eyes. I will live on for them he thought as his semblance activated and he let out a loud shout, as if challenging the heavens itself. With his semblance glowing around him like a raging fire, Savas pushed off, breaking the hardened dirt with his weight and force as he came charging straight at Nicolas, Sandalphon held at shoulder length to do a downward swing on the man.

Character Creation / Re: Joshua Schwarz (Ready for Approval)
« on: May 16, 2018, 03:52:51 PM »
First, hello to the RP. My apologies for the delay in the second review, but I'll take care of that:

Seeing that he did not attend any Academy and only did homeschool, a brief explanation on how he got accepted into Beacon Academy would help flesh out your history, which is pretty bare-boned.

This area is EXTREMELY vague and doesn't have much information in regards to the extent of his semblance. A couple things to note:
1. How much is "Substantial"? Please give an example or extent of what this looks like.
2. What are the drawbacks to using his semblance too many times in a row? As it stands, he is able to use it non-stop with only a mere 20 seconds between each interval. There will need to be more of a drawback to using it too many times in a row.

Those are the main concerns I have with your character. Please feel free to PM or message me on Discord if you have any questions.

Seeing that it was only two small children who were huddled behind the bush, Savas relaxed slightly. Knowing that his height and appearance would probably send the children running and screaming in terror, he merely looked on from a distance as his other teammates did their best to ease their fears.

Smiling slightly, the two children slowly came out from the brush, but froze in stark terror as their eyes landed first on Acero and then on Savas. Flinching back momentarily, the older of the two mustered courage and, with one arm around what looked to be his sister's shoulders, he moved cautiously over to Kei and took the candy and handed one to the little girl. Taking the candy, the girl smiled softly and, letting go of the boy, she ran over to Ribeiro and threw her tiny arms around Ribeiro's shoulders as a sudden wave of tears began to fall from the little girls face.

"W-we were ambushed..." the boy muttered quietly, seeming to have regained his composure. Popping the piece of candy in his mouth, he seemed to relax more as the assurance of the team around them gave his comfort. "The big scary Grimm came out of nowhere..." Looking over towards one wagon in particular, his eyes widened as it began to glisten. Wiping his face he simply looked down at the ground as the realization of what took place seemed to take over his demeanor.

Listening quietly to the lad tell what happened, Savas continued to monitor the perimeter amidst the little girl's crying. Sounds more and more like it's a Nuckalavee he thought, clenching his fists briefly. Walking closer to the team, he kept himself from making eye contact with the two children; they had seen enough horrors as it was and he didn't want to cause them to be fearful anymore. "Ngggrh...I'll look over the perimeter and see if there are any tracks" he growled, his voice rumbling through the calm forest. "Acero, take the right side. I'll take the left." Shooting a quick glance at the girl and boy, the girl had a look of pure fear as she looked up at Savas, clenching tighter around Ribeiro's neck. The boy, however, looked up in both fear and awe, first at Savas and then at Acero.

Snorting slightly, Savas began walking away before turning around. "Ngggrh...I think we're up against a Nuckalavee so stay ready. See if the boy can give a description." With that said, he turned and continued walking down the perimeter of the forest, keeping a close eye on anything that might give a clue as to what they may be up against.

Suntalia couldn't help but nod in approval as she watched Lilly's fighting abilities and Jima's weapons. Upon hearing Mogan's remarks about her semblance ability, Suntalia couldn't help but give him a dimpled smile. "To answer your questions, Mo, I haven't really tried to hit my maximum output, but the weather and circumstances do take a factor in how powerful it can become. As for how many times it can be used, I can fire it around five consecutive times in a row before I have to wait a couple minutes before using it again. The problem with channeling lightning is that it increases my heartbeat. Too much lightning and I can be at risk of heart palpitations and severe chest pains. I've only gotten to that point once in my life and I wouldn't want to relive it again if possible." Walking over to Mogan, she nudged him with her elbow, causing the built up static electricity to accidentally shock him slightly. "Unless your goal is to try and break my heart, then by all means go ahead and try." Winking at him, she laughed again and skipped over to where the other two girls were.

Looking over Jima's weapon intently, Suntalia was all but impressed by the build of the contraption. "Does it use dust by chance? I feel like it's capabilities could increase exponentially if it had dust capabilities." Seeing no areas on Grab n' Go that looked like it was for dust, she pulled out a couple rounds from Dynami and Areti. "I may not look it, but I am an expert dust specialist so I would be happy to try and make some combination of dust to work with this."

Glancing at Lilly, Suntalia gave her a big dimpled smile. "So what now, leader?" she inquired. However, before she could get a response, a loud shriek was heard from the distance. Looking towards the Northeast where the shriek seemed to have originated from, Suntalia put her bullets back in her pouch. "Sounds like more friends are coming to see us!" she exclaimed happily. Turning to Mogan, she gave him a sly smile. "Maybe we can test your method and see if I really could one-hit a big Grimm" she said before laughing lightly.

Having reached the bottom of the mine, the loud noise from Rackley and Conner's gunfire drew further noise from below. As Anza and Sandy reached the bottom, the glimmering glow of many menacing red eyes welcomed them at the bottom. Letting out a cry, a group of Creeps proceeded towards Anza and Sandy, their jaws open wide for flesh.

Having the ringing in his ear clear up, Rackley proceeded to breaking Aoshi down to its third form and loaded a small clip from his belt into Washi. Taking aim at the next Beowolf to come around the corner, he fired a few rounds at it's abdomen, causing it to go fall down to its death. As two more came around the corner, Rackley unloaded the remaining bullets into them, killing one and wounding the other. Pulling out the empty cartridge, he put it in the small pack on his hip and drew another to reload. "Think they made it down yet?" he inquired of Conner, all signs of nervousness gone as he was focused on the incoming fight. Reloading Washi, he fired two more rounds into the wounded Grimm, killing it before turning his attention to the remaining Beowolves that were still coming down.

  • 6 Beowolves remaining, one being the Alpha.
  • 10 Creeps approaching Anza and Sandy with more incoming.

Looking to tell Ribeiro to stay nearby, Savas merely let her go, seeing that it was evident that she was still uncomfortable to be around him.'d think being around each other for three years so far would make her not so nervous... he thought as proceeded on. Looking one last time over at Ribeiro, he smirked slightly as he saw her kneeling over the body of a dead horse. "Perhaps the rumors are true..." he whispered to himself. He had heard the rumors about her and her previous team; how she was a fanatic over the sight of blood, how she was the reason her teammate died, that she herself was the one who had killed her teammate.

Pushing all thoughts aside, Savas came over to one of the caravans and inspected it. Scowling slightly at the sight of two dead humans lying amidst crates of cargo, Savas proceeded towards the next caravan, when a crackling of a twig from the side of the road near Kei and Acero caused him to stop and listen. Watching the brush on the roadside carefully, his eyes caught a slight movement from a nearby bush.

Whistling quickly over towards Kei and Acero, Savas motioned them to investigate the bush that the movement had come from prior. Looking over towards Ribeiro, he motioned for her to come closer to where he was standing. Pulling Sandalphon out of its sheathe, he readied himself to fight in the event that it be an ambush.

OOC: I'm thinking of having it be two little children huddled in the bush. Figured I would let you guys know since you're all up next. If you decide not to go with that, then feel free to have it be some Grimm coming out. The choice is yours.

Approved Characters / Re: Azre and Erza Sundown
« on: April 18, 2018, 04:37:20 PM »
Works for me!

Approved 2 of 2.

Approved Characters / Re: Nami
« on: April 17, 2018, 02:01:02 PM »
Sorry for the delay here. There was still a lot of hesitancy among the other staff about letting a science project person be allowed, but nothing enough for it to downright be denied.

That all said, this suffices for me to allow so I will give this the second approval.

Approved 2 of 2.

Approved Characters / Re: Azre and Erza Sundown
« on: April 17, 2018, 01:55:58 PM »
Sorry for the delay here. I had to discuss the semblances with the other staff as there are potential problems with these semblances. First things first, I want to bring this into factor:

"Mental Manipulation: This includes effects that alter or directly affect anotherís mind. Mind Reading, Mind Control, causing fear, etc. Effects based on the senses(such as creating illusions) are allowed."

This is what made there be a problem. Though these are illusion based semblances, they also have a drastic effect on a person's mind, especially Erza's semblance, which is where the main issues lie. And so, since this is your third character as well as the fact that I am the destroyer of dreams and expectations, I will have to be a bit more technical in regards to the semblances:

However, if she's allowed to focus on a person while at her most intimidating, they enter a temporary state of paralysis where they're unable to move from fear - until Erza chooses to down the intensity of the illusion and set them free, or scare them to the point of retreat.
This will not be allowed. This basically makes it so that she or Azre can auto-hit a person who has been paralyzed by her semblance. Auto-hitting is not allowed and so this will need to be changed.

2. The part on where Erza takes on a person's greatest fears is also a bit of a stretch. The problem lies two-fold:
  • How is she able to know what a person's greatest fears are and then able to manifest it?
  • How would she manifest a person's greatest fears if their fears are the dark, heights, deep water, or rejection?
These two things make it so that the manifestation of a person's fears would be sketchy at best. For example, if my character's greatest fears was the dark and the fear of falling, how would that manifest into Erza's semblance? Would she simply take on a darkened silhouette? I can tell you now that, if that was the case and it happened when there was a light on, my character wouldn't be afraid of that simply because of the light that was on.
Also, what if she ran into a person who did not have any fears at all? The problem here is that this doesn't simply become a physical illusion, but rather can turn quickly into a mental control over a person, which is one of many banned semblances.

Now, that all being said, I do like the semblances that you have down. I just think that there needs to be a few restrictions to it. Here's what we as staff all agreed upon:

1. There needs to be a couple more things that can be done to break the illusions aside from being distraction. For that, we recommend that you specify what type of distractions (loud noises, bright light, etc) can distract them as well as being physically touched by the person under the semblance can also cause it to break.
2. As I mentioned earlier, the temporary paralysis needs to be removed. Our suggestion is to go with what would happen under normal circumstances to a person with a phobia: fight or flight. If I was afraid of spiders and someone took on the illusion of a spider, I can tell you right now that I would not stand there paralyzed by fear. Instead, I would either do everything I could to eradicate said spider or I would turn and run as fast as I can away from it. This option removes the mind controlling through fear aspect from your characters entirely and allows the person who is under the effects to still have control over their character.

These are the issues that we found with the semblance. Feel free to PM me if you have any concerns or questions.

Laughing at Mogan's remark about a friendly competition, Suntalia merely gave him a thumbs up as he volunteered to take on the Grimm before them. Leaping up onto a low tree limb, Suntalia watched with fascination as Mogan fought the Ursa as well as explained his semblance to the team. The amount of details entailed in how his semblance was used as well as the complication of what could happen to him if it backfired on him was nothing less than impressive. As he slowly took down the Ursa, the final blow was enough to cause Suntalia to whistle impressively at his attack. His remark about his right arm was also enough to pique her curiosity and so she made a mental note to ask him about it later.

Wanting to ask a plethora of questions about Mogan's fighting style as well as his semblance, Suntalia was cut off as another Ursa came out from the behind the trees. "Looks like all the noise is drawing more friends to us" she remarked, jumping off the tree limb. Skipping over to where the Grimm was, Suntalia turned to the others. "I'll take the next one if you don't mind!" Turning her attention back to the beast before her, the monstrous creature stood up on its hind legs, towering over the petite girl. "Unlike Mogan's semblance, mine is rather simple" she started, as she nimbly dodged under a huge horizontal slash from the Ursa. Letting out a roar, the Grimm continued a barrage of claw slashes while Suntalia easily dodged around the attacks. "Simply put, I control lightning. Depending on the situation, it'll take me anywhere between two to four seconds to charge up my semblance." Laughing lightly, Suntalia jumped over another slash, landing on the creatures arm. Using this opportunity, Suntalia activated her semblance and kicked the beast in the head, causing it to rear back slightly. Jumping off, she landed a few feet away and then lunged forward, closing the distance so that she was right in front of the creature. Placing a finger on the Ursa's chest, she smiled at it. "Bang" she replied as a massive bolt of lightning struck out of her finger, blowing a hole right through the Ursa and the tree behind it. As the Ursa began to disintegrate, the tree that took the blow also began to fall over from the attack. Turning to face the others, she smiled at them, oblivious to the static charge that caused a few strands of her hair to stand up. "As you can see, I'm also no tank and more of an agile fighter. However, unlike Mogan, I specialize in dealing with numerous enemies and dwindling the herd."

Skipping back to the others, she stood next to Mogan and smiled. "Aside from that, I'm also a dust specialist and all my weapons use a combination of dusts. I can show you guys later if we get the chance." Looking at Lilly and Jima, Suntalia gave them a thumbs up. "So, that's me. Who's next?" As if asking for trouble, the howl of a Beowolf sounded nearby their position. "Guess we have our next contestant!" she exclaimed, skipping ahead a few paces before turning around. "Shall we?" she inquired before skipping on ahead.

Laughing lightly at Mogan, Suntalia helped him clean up everything on the blanket and proceeded to placing them on her wagon. "I love a good joke or ten. I personally think we should try and prank the other two when we get the chance." she whispered to Mogan winking at him in the process.

Having put everything away, Suntalia grabbed Firestorm and skipped along to catch up with the rest of the team. Resting Firestorm back in its harness, she continued to listen to Mogan while humming a light tune to herself. Skipping on ahead, she caught up to Lilly who was busy dancing along the beaten path. "You must really love to dance!" she remarked, skipping slightly in beat to Lilly's pace. Smiling as she was fascinated to the shadowy figure who was dancing alongside Lilly, Suntalia admired the colors that played across her sight. "Did you always love to dance?" she inquired of Lilly. Turning to face the others, she motioned for them to catch up before turning her attention back to her team leader.

Listening to Jima explain her semblance, Suntalia couldn't help but be intrigued by it immensely. "Wow! I've nev...." Before she could finish her sentence, Suntalia found herself splattered with cake in her face and listening to Mogan lose his composure and rant on about karma as well as the pronunciation of his name.

Opening up one of her eyes, Suntalia reached over and grabbed a napkin and proceeded to wipe the cake off her face while Mogan continued to speak. Having wiped off majority of the cake, she turned and smiled at Mogan when he finished speaking. "I think karma tastes a lot like chocolate cake." Laughing lightly, she turned to take another piece of bacon as well as a lightly sugared pastry and took a bite. "Sorry if I took it too far with you, Mogan. I tend to get excited with meeting new friends." Raking her fingers through her hair, she found that there was still some cake in her hair so she grabbed another napkin and begun wiping the cake out of her hair when the thought hit her. "Speaking of missions or sparring, how about we take a little trip into the Emerald Forest after we finish eating?" she asked excitedly. "That would give us all a chance to see each other's fighting style, right? Right? Right?" Looking over at Mogan, she gave him a thumbs up and a big dimpled smile before turning her attention to Lilly in hopes that her team leader would approve of this idea.

Taking note of Ribeiro's noticeable distance between the two of them, Savas merely shrugged it off, knowing that it was inevitable that she would still be nervous around him. Checking on the other two and noticing the same tension between them, he simply sighed before turning his attention back to the forest surrounding them. The road was nothing more than a tightly packed dirt road, but the grooves within the dirt pointed to the vehicle traffic that also passed through.

However, if there was one thing that bothered Savas the most, it wasn't the lack of traffic on the road; it was the eerily quiet that surrounded the team. The lack of birds singing in the air as well as the rustling of the trees only made the hair on his neck stand as a bead of sweat slid down his neck. Something doesn't feel right here... he thought, scanning the trees more carefully as the team continued to proceed down the road.

After what felt like an eternity of awkward walking, Savas and the others turned a corner on the road to what appeared to be a battlefield. Demolished wagons littered the roadside while bloodied bodies of both human and horses alike laid dead near the destruction. "Ngggrh...look for survivors, but stay in your pairs" he growled, turning to his teammates before quickening his pace to the front of the wagon line where he proceeded to look through the first wagon for survivors.

Laughing at Mogan's seriousness with being Vacuo buddies, Suntalia poked Mogan in his cheek while he enjoyed a bite from the cake before slapping his shoulder playfully. "You're funny Mogan! I think we're going to get along just fine" she remarked, giving him a mischievous smile before turning her attention to Lilly. "If Moggie doesn't want to be Vacuo buddies, then I guess it'll just be the two of us. Or..." glancing over at Jima and then back at Lilly. "...maybe we can be all become girl friends and have Moggie sleep in the corner." Looking at Mogan again with a slight twinkle in her eyes, she beam a smile at him. "We will have to figure out how we're going to set up our room since there's three girls and one guy. Maybe he can sleep in the closet?" laughing lightly, she slapped Mogan's arm again a couple times before turning back to Lilly. "Going back to your question, Lilly. I'm also a fast-paced fighter who specializes in making a variety of dust concoctions to be used with my weapons." Pointing to Dynami and Areti that were holstered on her belt first before pointing at Firestorm that was resting against the tree.

Taking another bite from the bacon, Suntalia reveled in the flavor of the food before swallowing it so that she could continue. "As for my semblance..." she remarked, activating her semblance briefly before deactivating it. "I'll let your imagination run for just a moment." That said, she moved as if to poke Mogan again, but instead sent a small shock of electricity that traveled from her finger to hit him in his arm. Laughing lightly at Mogan, Suntalia gave him an innocent smile before turning her attention away. "Hope that helps with your imagination" she replied, smiling at Lilly and then at Jima. "What about you Jima?" she inquired. She was rather curious as to whether her assumption about Jima's semblance was true or not.

Suntalia was visibly startled when a voice out of nowhere spoke to her about the bacon from the tree. Searching the tree and then around, it took a moment before she spotted someone walking up to the picnic site. Waving happily at her so as to hide her surprise earlier, she found that the person who walked up was also the person who had apparently spoke to her from the tree. Maybe it's her semblance? she thought as she gave a beaming smile to her as she spoke to her again.

However, before she could even speak, another person came rushing over to where Suntalia and Jima were seated. Waving at her, she heard her introduce herself as their team captain. However, much of Suntalia's attention was turned to what their leader had brought. Cake.... she thought, half drooling before she caught herself. "Hey!" she exclaimed happily. "My name is Cake and I love Suntalia!" she said before catching herself. "Errr, that didn't come out right. I meant to say is that my name is Suntalia and I love cake!" Laughing slightly to herself, she continued to bring out the dishes and silverware as well as some cups. "I'm looking forward to being on the same team as you two." Looking first at Lilly and then at Jima, Suntalia gave Jima a big smile. "I'm looking forward to working with you Jima. When I heard that you were going to be put on a new team, I was hoping above all hopes that we would be on the same team!" Pulling the orange juice out, she put it near the side before she turned back to Jima. "Speaking of, why did yo..."

However, before she could finish her sentence, Suntalia was interrupted by their fourth member, the only guy on the team. Listening to Mogan give his introduction as well as how he had done his homework on the other members of the team, Suntalia simply smiled and listened to him. "You're from Vacuo?" she inquired, giving Mogan an arched eyebrow before cutting all restraints. "OH MY GOSH!!! SO AM I!!!!" she exclaimed happily, before moving quickly over to sit next to Mogan. "What part in Vacuo did you grow up in? Did you have fun at Shade? Did you have a lot of friends there? Why did you come to Beacon? Can we be friends?" Looking over at the other two girls, she flashed them a huge grin and pointed at Mogan. "Can you believe it? He's from Vacuo! It's like we can be Vacuo buddies!" It was then that another thought crossed her mind. "Wait, wait wait!" she proclaimed, looking at Lilly for a moment. "You're a transfer student also, right? What school did you transfer from?" Grabbing a piece of bacon, she began to chew on it before realizing that no one else had started eating. "Oh! I guess we can start eating, right?" Laughing lightly, she continued to chew on it while listening to the others.

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