Author Topic: Caro Hopplen  (Read 5997 times)

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Re: Caro Hopplen
« Reply #15 on: March 04, 2017, 08:28:15 PM »
I think the major issue people are having with the character is that she has gone through this extremely traumatic experience but has come out of it reasonably together which is not only unrealistic it draws into question why you want her growing up with wolves in the first place. Caro shouldn't only not speak often she should be barely able to speak even if she needs to, not because she is shy but she simply doesn't understand the concept of spoken languages. Now I understand that playing a character who walks on all fours and doesn't get how toilets work wouldn't be fun but as it stands Caro might as well have been by herself the entire time. Very little of her personality traits couldn't of been from isolation rather than wolves and the only thing that does is her semblance. Sure she growls at threats but that is natural rather than wolf-like. On top of this you should explain how Caro managed to get into beacon with only six years of education, maybe even ask if the hunter which found Caro could be one of Beacon's staff? as that would provide a good educator plus a good word in with the headmaster.
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Re: Caro Hopplen
« Reply #16 on: March 07, 2017, 12:17:14 PM »
Oke, I took your idea that her teacher was a formerly teacher at beacon academy and  I tried to point out more, that she still can't talk much and has problems to come around

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Re: Caro Hopplen
« Reply #17 on: March 07, 2017, 12:30:33 PM »
It might be better that, seeing as so many characters have this traumatic life and that orphaned experience, a simple, carefree life with none of those sob stories nor any unique events might work well. I mean, the mods have seen everything there is to offer anyway.
« Last Edit: March 07, 2017, 04:26:45 PM by MonsterManic »
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Re: Caro Hopplen
« Reply #18 on: March 12, 2017, 06:49:29 AM »
Welp, this Character was an idea anyway. I made her just a fearl child because I needed an excuse for her semblance XD

So if it won't work, I let Kenny be my only character for a while or just make up a new Character and put Caro in MiA

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Re: Caro Hopplen
« Reply #19 on: March 12, 2017, 06:57:34 AM »
You can just leave Caro here for a while. As long as you keep a copy saved elsewhere you can have as many characters in the WiP board until one of the mods asks you to stop.
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