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Gavin Ardent [Ready for Approval]
« on: October 28, 2017, 08:18:15 PM »
CHARACTER

Name: Gavin Ardent

Age: 18, born Saule 8th.

Species and Gender: Human Male

Symbol:  A white sword with green, avian wings in place of a crossguard.

Occupation: Huntsman in Training - Beacon Academy First Year

Appearance: Thin of frame with pale white skin and tousled blonde hair, Gavin is a frail looking young man whose green eyes nevertheless shine with life. His common attire consists of a white blazer, worn buttoned over a black dress shirt, slim fitting black trousers with a green belt, and a long green scarf.

Gavin stands at 5'10'' tall, and weighs 52 kg, being somewhat underweight.

History: Born to a common family in Vale City, Gavin was an ill child, near-constantly bedbound, only occasionally allowed short excursions outside in a wheelchair. With no social life to speak of, Gavin immersed himself in games, electronics, and most importantly, stories about Huntsmen and Huntresses, heroes who traveled the world, protecting the weak became a source of strength for the young Gavin, who wanted to live a life of freedom and excitement most of all.

These idle days continued until Gavin was 12 years old, when one afternoon, as the sun filtered in through his window, he found the strength to stand unaided for the first time in his life, weak of body but strong of his spirit, his desire to go out into the world had awakened his Semblance.

After spending time acclimating to a normal life, Gavin realized that his dream to be a Huntsman called to him, and begged his parents to allow him to attend Signal Academy, and though initially hesitant, they eventually relented, and his path to being a Huntsman, while starting a little later than most, started all the same, and eventually took him to Beacon Academy.

Personality: Exuberant, confident, genuine but unfortunately somewhat tactless, Gavin's sheltered upbringing has a habit of showing itself at the worst times, despite this, he typically means well. Fond of the outdoors, he can often be found reading or playing games on his scroll outdoors on his offtime.

As a result of spending most of his childhood pretty much on his own, Gavin's social skills still leave something to be desired, he can be a bit too interested in other people, coming off as clingy, and not always having the regard for other people's personal space that he should.

His childhood has also resulted in another notable but unfortunate personality flaw: like many in the world of Remnant, Gavin holds a minor degree of prejudice against the Faunus. While not an aggressive bigot, he nevertheless finds himself uncomfortable around them, resulting in him making attempts to keep his distance whenever possible. However, an important point to note is that he hasn't yet interacted with any of their kind enough to know that the unfair prejudice is unfounded.

His demeanor flattens a bit in the winter months, due to less exposure to sunlight making him feel a bit weaker, but he tries his best to not let it show too much.

Aura and Semblance: Gavin's Aura is White.

His Semblance, Sol invigorates him when exposed to sunlight, suppressing his illness, and granting him increased strength and stamina, the degree of improvement depending on how strong the sunlight is. However, when deprived of sunlight his strength diminishes, to the point where he is once again bedridden after about two days. If his Aura is depleted, these effects take place far more rapidly, with him being unable to move after about an hour, until his Aura is restored and he is exposed to more sunlight.

Functioning like a battery, Sol "charges" Gavin depending on the intensity of the sunlight available, and gradually degrades in power when sunlight is unavailable, with combat and other strenuous activity depleting his energy faster. This means he can function at night or indoors, but runs the risk of running out of energy if he overexerts himself with too many strong attacks.

At peak condition, such as in a desert at noon, Sol allows Gavin to perform incredible feats of strength, such as splitting a boulder with his sword, but this will greatly deplete his energy reserves, knocking him back to a more normal level, and require him to charge up again if he wants to continue using powerful attacks, which can take time.

On a normal, moderately sunny day, Gavin operates at a level that is slightly stronger physically than the average Beacon student, but if there are several days of poor weather, he can end up becoming somewhat weaker, putting him at risk on long missions in the winter months.

Combat Behavior:  Gavin's personality factors heavily into his combat style, which is focused on hitting enemies hard and fast with close ranged frontal assaults, charging into the fray with the jet function of his weapon. His enthusiasm can lead to recklessness, which is especially dangerous as he is more defenseless than most when his Aura is depleted due to his strength draining rapidly. As a result, sustained fights aren't his forte.

He is capable of mid-range combat thanks to his weapon's flamethrower configuration, but he has no true long range options, meaning if an enemy can engage him at range and keep him from closing in, he's at a heavy disadvantage.

WEAPON

Name: Galatine

Primary Form: Galatine is a weapon composed of two primary parts, a sword and a sheath.

The sword part of Galatine is a bastard sword sword with a design similar to Gavin's emblem, featuring green wings for the crossguard. The wings do not curve too drastically, to allow Gavin access to the triggers above them, doubling as activation for Galatine's special features, and also to guard the blade's ricasso. the bottom of the blade's hilt can open to reveal a Dust vial chamber.

The sheath of Galatine is somewhat overwide for the sword, and is patterned with holes similar to that of the chamber for a flamethrower, with the exception of two grooves at the bottom of the sheath, designed to allow space for the triggers, and a spot on each side of the sheath, both of which open up to reveal additional Dust chambers.

Secondary Form: Flamethrower Mode: By sheathing the sword, and shunting its handle sideways, Galatine can be held in a manner similar to a gun, when one of the triggers is pressed in this state, Galatine's sheath will open up at the tip, and its flame function will create a wider continuous stream of fire, like a Flamethrower.

Tertiary Form: Jet Mode: By sheathing the sword, and pulling both triggers, the sheath will unfold to reveal the tip of the blade, and two extra jets of flame, powered by the Dust loaded into each side of the sheath, when pointed behind Gavin, this mode can be used to propel him forward at high speed.

Dust Functions: Galatine uses a white Dust, that creates a brilliant white flame, by pulling one of the triggers when the blade has been loaded, it will be coated in flame, increasing its damage output.

Gavin typically keeps a few extra vials of fire Dust, and one vial of water Dust in a pouch in his weapon locker, which is worn at the waist on missions.

The blade can channel other Dust types, but with the exception of Fire and Water, they are rarely used.

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Water: Sends a heavy stream of water along and off of the blade, acting as an emergency coolant and fire extinguisher.
Lightning: Channels Lightning along the blade, does not work through the sheath.
Ice: Freezes the blade, typically useless.
Gravity: Makes the blade heavier, typically useless.


History: Gavin forged Galatine at Signal Academy to suit his aggressive combat style.
« Last Edit: October 30, 2017, 12:59:26 PM by Mechajin »

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Re: Gavin Ardent [Looking for Feedback!]
« Reply #1 on: October 30, 2017, 05:30:43 AM »
First off welcome to the site, you've made a very good start to your first character so it's only really details I would recommend before moving it over the character creation proper. Your character sheet is kinda where you sell the character in question to be involved in teams or missions so the more you can put in the more impressive the character will seem to others.

As for specifics it is probably worth putting atleast in general terms how much the sun boosts him up and how much dust Gavin carries to power his weapons.

No criticism is too harsh so hit me with your best shot.

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Re: Gavin Ardent
« Reply #2 on: October 30, 2017, 10:48:58 AM »
Thanks for the feedback King! After talking over your points with quite a few people in the discord, and making some edits I think Gavin's ready to move into character creation. I'll leave this up for a little while though in case anyone else has any feedback they'd like to give!