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Aurora Hesperid (moved)
« on: January 28, 2017, 11:54:03 AM »
CHARACTER

Name: Aurora Hesperid
Nicknames: Rory

Age: 17, born Huā 14th

Species and Gender: Female Human

Symbol: A crescent moon covered in flowers partially surrounding a sun with flaming tendrils coming from it.

Occupation: 1st year Beacon Student and Blogger/Online Writer

Appearance: Aurora would be what you call a very pretty lass, with an ample, shapely figure and flawless (at least after the concealer) brown skin. She stands at 6’3” with a weight of 179 lbs. Her face is long with a slim and sharp jaw, high cheekbones, and big emerald eyes framed in long lashes. Her nose is high, slim, and a little crooked, a fact that Aurora is always self-conscious about. She has dark brown hair that she keeps 1-2 inches below her shoulder, something that Aurora very much treasures. Her hands and arms are frequently painted with henna, and her symbol is tattooed in black on her upper back. Something that you might’ve already guessed by now is that Aurora frequently uses cosmetics and considers herself an expert. Whether or not that may be true is still up for debate.

Her usual clothing outside of combat situations is in a boho chic style. Loose, lacy, cropped, patterned, crochet, bohemian-style things. Jewelry is often abundant as well, especially articles that bring a delicate or simple feel to an outfit. She has a particular affection for draped clothing, just a little fun fact. As for shoes, Aurora likes ankle boots, knee or thigh-high boots, and heels most of all.

Aurora’s combat outfit also reflects these preferences, and it has her weapons in mind as well. In combat, she wears a cropped v-neck lace tank top in pinkish tan, leaving room on her arms and waist for knife straps, though it should be noted that she wears equally lacy detached sleeves which flare out mid-forearm. She also wears a long cantaloupe orange double-slitted maxi dress, and let me tell you, that dress is slit high. To hold up her white stockings, Aurora also sports a garter belt. Because allure practicality. They can’t be falling down mid-fight, can they?

History: Aurora was the oldest of five in her family, consisting of two boys and three girls, Aurora, Nalini, Alex, Sona, and Rafael, from oldest to youngest. Unlike Aurora, the other four were all cat faunus. The small army was parented by Anjali Chandra (the faunus) and Jay Hesperid, who both worked as hunters. The family lived in the main city of Vale, well-funded though nothing special. Aurora being the oldest was expected to watch her younger siblings and all, which she did. Just not very well. She constantly shirked responsibility, scolded her siblings over practically nothing, and dumped her chores and such on the second-oldest, Nalini, no matter her young age. School-wise she was below average, though she was pretty good at writing. Aurora could’ve probably done better, she was a bright kid, but she really never found any reason to. Socially she had a lot of friends though, Aurora was quite skilled in that particular field. Pretty, nice, and funny, even if she wasn’t too academic. The lack of care disappointed her parents, Anjali especially, but any attempts to rectify her behavior turned out to be unsuccessful.

Up to the age of 10, everything was fine. At least that’s what Aurora thought. In reality, her parents were drifting apart, arguing more and more every day. Her siblings ran rampant in the house. It was nothing short of chaos at times, but Aurora never really cared. This all came to a climax when Aurora’s mother Anjali left. Just packed up her bags and walked out on the whole family. The kids were devastated, Anjali included, and so was Jay. To compensate for the loss of a second wage to help raise the kids, Jay had to take more jobs and missions, leaving the responsibility of her siblings up to Aurora when he was away. At first, she rejected this plan and refused, but soon settled into her new role as the ‘mother’ of the family. She learned how to better look after her siblings, how to clean, though they did pay the neighbor to mass-produce meals to heat up at dinner and breakfast. She was still basically running the household when her father was away and her siblings were home from school or daycare, and Aurora liked it. This new sense of responsibility also extended to school, and even though she didn’t have much time to do schoolwork at home since she had to take care of her siblings, Aurora made sure to get at least fairly good grades wherever she could. For most, divorces caused people to worsen, but it did a lot of good for Aurora.

Aurora also begged her father to send her to Signal to train to become a huntress just like her parents. Jay was hesitant at first, but he eventually caved and let Aurora attend. She absolutely loved it, and was always eager to learn more and more, doing quite well combat-wise and still maintaining okay grades. At home she still served as the head of the house, keeping everything up to par. At school she discovered her semblance quite early, and on that basis, developed her combat style and weapons. As she grew up, so did her siblings, and she had more time with friends and such, regaining her foothold in that world. Her father even remarried to a wonderful former-Vacuan author by the name of Autumn, who had also encouraged Aurora’s growing interest in writing, even pushing her to make a blog/story site online that quickly grew in popularity. Aurora was quite popular in real life too, a social butterfly in all aspects.

At the age of 16, Anjali magically came back. She reached out to Aurora’s siblings, being faunus like herself, wanting to become part of their lives again. What the Hesperid children didn’t know about Anjali’s departure was that a part of the split was caused by differing opinions on the White Fang, now continuously growing more violent. Anjali in favor even with the violence, and Jay opposing, pitying them and their cause, but vehemently against their ways. What Jay didn’t know was that Anjali had been part of the White Fang for a while, by the time she came back, she had risen to the rank of Master Sergeant. Jay was still very much opposed to Anjali coming back into their lives, but reluctantly allowed for her to visit and try to bond with the children.

This didn’t turn out well. For one, Aurora vehemently hated Anjali, both because of the fact that she left and because of the personality she now had, caustic, biting, and haughty. Especially towards her, the only human daughter she had, and Autumn. She played nice around Jay, but he found out quickly about how different she really was. To Aurora’s siblings, Anjali was sickly sweet, spoiling them and slowly feeding them anti-human values. Jay was horrified when he found out, threatening to turn in evidence of her involvement in the White Fang if she didn’t stay away. Having no other choice, Anjali heeded his words. She wasn’t happy though, far from it.

She desperately wanted to see her children, but she had no way to get to them. She couldn’t keep on visiting them lest Jay expose her, and she couldn’t try for legal custody, whether dual or sole, for both that reason and that the children didn’t even like her very much, not to mention that Anjali was the one who left and Jay had much better surroundings. So how would she get ahold of her children? Well, she was White Fang now, she was powerful. She had resources and she was no longer the woman she was six years earlier. Not long after, Jay Hesperid met his end on a mission in Mistral. His occupation was dangerous, he’d made enemies, and Mistral’s underground was no secret. It was sad, but it was no surprise. Autumn and the children were devastated. And partly suspicious as well. Custody of the children went to Anjali of course, and so they all moved in with mother dearest. Autumn wanted to keep in touch with them as well, and Anjali allowed her to so she could keep on her kids’ good side, limited and brief as the visits were.

After about a month, they started to settle in. At least the younger ones did, receiving the love and affection of Anjali. But Aurora? She was discontent. Anjali didn’t treat her badly per se, she was still her daughter, but she was still treated significantly worse than the others, and often spent her time alone or holed up in her room. Time with friends outside of school was limited, time with anyone outside of school was limited. Aurora still managed to keep in touch with Autumn outside of the steadily decreasing visits. She was still suspicious though, especially since Anjali apparently held a very menial job as an accountant, yet made surprising cash. Soon enough, through overheard conversations and even a few tailings, Aurora learned of her mother’s occupation, and of the fact that her father’s death hadn’t been a result of the mission. As a result, she grew to hate her mother even more, sharing the information with her step-mother and was dead-set on revenge of the exposing kind. Autumn opposed this though, fearing for the safety of Aurora and her siblings. To please her, Aurora agreed to stop and just let Autumn take care of it. Or at least she said so. But trying to find evidence that Anjali was a member of the White Fang was hard, and no solid proof turned up once she learned that Aurora knew of her real job. The house was no longer a central site, and no White Fang activities took place.

Throughout the whole ordeal, Aurora still went to Signal and did her dues there. When the time came, she was accepted into Beacon as well, an opportunity she took eagerly to get away from her mother, though she was reluctant about leaving her siblings alone with her. She also kept up with her blog and stories online, which had maintained their popularity.

Personality: Aurora is a very personable kind of gal with a kind of magnetic personality, the kind of charisma that draws you in, evident in the number of friends and acquaintances she has. Backing that up, she’s also flirty and sociable, funny as well, though sometimes at the expense of others. As in, her sense of humor sometimes comes at the cost of putting others down. Though it should be noted that she tries to apologize whenever it wouldn’t ruin the mood.

Otherwise, she’s still what you would call a nice or sweet person, generally wishing the best for everyone else. Aurora can even be motherly and caring to people she sees as needing it and people she just likes to fuss over. Adding to her substance, she’s strong-willed and fiercely loyal as well. Though on the flip side she’s a bit petty and self-centered, getting attached easily as well. And if someone makes her upset, you can bet she’ll hold a grudge for as long as possible until they apologize and then go to the ends of the earth to win back her favor. Luckily, this doesn’t come easily. She also tends to have little patience regarding the shortcomings or incompetence of others, thinking herself better than others.

Intelligence-wise she's pretty much average, though she's clever in social situations and a skilled liar. Aurora does sometimes dumb herself down to fit in with others though. A note is that she's fairly racist towards Faunus.

Aura and Semblance: Aurora’s aura is fairly strong, able to heal more and do more in general, though the amount is only average, as is the resilience. The color of her aura is a cantaloupe orange.

Her semblance is a crude telekinesis semblance, with it she can push objects away, pull them close, or hold them in place relevant to their proximity to Aurora. She can’t move them in any direction, only to her or away from her. These limits do have their own advantages though, such as less strain, enough to heavily rely on her semblance in combat. It should be noted that the faster the object moves and the heavier her load, the more the strain. At most, she can move around 300 pounds total, and as for speed, it varies based off of each individual object’s weight:

> 1 pound : up to 60 mph
1-60 pounds: up to 50 mph
60-120 pounds: up to 40 mph
120-180 pounds: up to 30 mph
180-210 pounds: up to 20 mph
210-240 pounds: up to 10 mph
240-300 pounds: up to 3 mph

(Note: this is not counting any objects that might be in the way to provide resistance)

The range of movement would be within Aurora's line of sight, and close enough that she can clearly make out what the object is. Objects can remain hovering outside of Aurora's sight though, like if she turns her head and can't see it anymore.

Combat Behavior: Aurora is a more than formidable fighter, with speed and strength on her side, very familiar with the strategy of overwhelming others. Her endurance is also high, adding to her strengths. Aurora can also fight multiple opponents at once without too too much difficulty, though any number above 3 is out of the question. Overall, her combat style is very fluid and acrobatic, pretty as well. Unfortunately this fluidity can be something that she relies on too much, which is where her weaknesses come in. If this fluidity in movement is disrupted, she’ll lose balance, rhythm, leaving herself wide open for a few moments. Even without this, Aurora has poor defense in general with fighters who use kicks and speedsters, as the former provides an unusual angle of attack for her to block, and the latter is fast enough to disrupt her movement, her overwhelming tactics.

Close-quarters combat, though something Aurora is skilled in, is not her only or main form of combat. She also uses her throwing knives, equal in importance with her particular style. As such, Aurora may start out with either style, and is equally skilled in them. In this knife-throwing, Aurora sometimes uses her semblance to boost her throws or fix her trajectory, then of course uses it to pull the knives back.

WEAPON

Name: Nyx (left) and Hemera (right)

Primary Form: Dual wielded machetes stored on her back.

Dust Functions: Nyx and Erebus only ever utilize one type, kinetic repulsion dust to give some knockback if Aurora ever wants or needs it. The dust is inserted via a hatch on each blade handle, and can be left empty if she wishes.

History: Aurora made them at Signal. Seeing their simplicity, her teachers expressed some discontentment at them. Until she revealed the rest of her arsenal.

WEAPON2/MISCELLANEOUS WEAPONS

Name: None

Primary Form: Fifty throwing knives stored practically everywhere on her body thanks to a bunch of straps. Eight around her midriff, two on her upper arms, twenty on a belt over her skirt, ten around her mid-thighs, and ten around her calves.

Each knife type has a slightly different appearance, though the base is the same: steel hilt wrapped in a thin layer of light pink yarn for grip, a short, double-edged steel blade continuing from the hilt, each only about 6 inches long. Knives that use lightning Dust have a yellow lightning bolt engraving on the hilt, knives that use the repulsion mix have a target-like design in gray, knives that use fire have an orange flame, and knives that use ice have a light blue snowflake.

Dust Functions: All of her throwing knives utilize Dust in them, however one should keep in mind that each are one use only, so until the Dust canister is refilled, they will be normal throwing knives. Before their use, it’s possible to use the knives just as normal throwing knives as well by not activating the Dust.
-Lightning (10 knives on her skirt) : Electrocutes whatever the blade lands in. If 5 or more blades land within five feet of each other, they will form a grid of electricity between themselves. This grid will stay up for 5 seconds before fizzling out.
-Repulsion + a bit of fire and glass (20 knives, the 10 on her midriff and arms and 10 on her skirt) : Provides a good amount of force against whatever it lands in, enough to knock back an average human being, with additional damage thanks to the fire and glass Dust.
-Fire (the 10 knives around her calves) : Ignites whatever the blade lands in. If 5 or more blades land within five feet of each other, they will connect to each other by flame.
-Ice (the 10 around her thighs) : Gradually freezes the area within a 2 foot radius of the blade.

History: Aurora designed these at Signal to complement her semblance.

« Last Edit: April 03, 2017, 07:30:14 AM by The Mythic Scribe »
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Re: Aurora Hesperid
« Reply #1 on: January 28, 2017, 10:15:54 PM »
This might be a stupid question but do people or Grimm count as 'objects' for Aurora's semblance?
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Re: Aurora Hesperid
« Reply #2 on: January 28, 2017, 10:56:06 PM »
No such thing as a stupid question. Yeah, I haven't finished describing the semblance yet, but no, they do not. No living organisms or aura covered objects. Then again, if there was a normal person without aura, she could possibly tug them closer using their clothes.
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Re: Aurora Hesperid
« Reply #3 on: March 11, 2017, 01:08:15 PM »
Updated with full written history. If there are any weak spots or holes, please don't hesitate to tell me.
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Re: Aurora Hesperid
« Reply #4 on: March 12, 2017, 12:10:54 AM »
Hayo Mythic! Few small things I can see;

- Appearances of weapons are missing
- You got a syntax error with your bold and underline tags near the bottom
- Semblance details: it would be best to put the semblance costs; does it use Aurora's aura (catchy), or does it use stamina? How much? What is the maximum weight she can move, and at what speed? What does this cost? Explaining these will help figure out the limits of the character.

As far as I can see, the history is - well, I enjoyed it very much. Feels fresh and well written. The personality section could use an addition of a summary paragraph, just for a bit of extra detail, but it's not necessary. I would say that increasing the length of the combat behavior may be helpful; in particular, describing the way she fights, then summarizing the strengths and weaknesses.

Thanks!
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Re: Aurora Hesperid
« Reply #5 on: March 12, 2017, 01:05:32 AM »
Yeah, those parts aren't exactly finished yet... But thanks anyway, elaboration on semblance things are always my least favorite thing to write. It'll definitely help when I do flesh it out. When I do, that summary paragraph will come too, and the lists will be gone as well, those are just to help me write out the basics before I really write the sections out.

Thanks for taking a look at it Glow!
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Re: Aurora Hesperid
« Reply #6 on: March 12, 2017, 03:13:37 AM »
Huh, I've always found that the semblance section was one of the easiest to write (curse you appearance/history). Since we seem to be polar opposites, might I be allowed to give you a hand, as you did with me b4?

When you say "crude", does that mean she simply hasn't unlocked the full potential of it yet, or is it simply worse than normal telekinesis semblances?
Elaborating on a bit more detail, how many items can she hold up at a time, and the weight of those items? Say she is holding one of her knives, how long can she hold it for? Can she throw the knife with her semblance, and if so, how far? "In proximity to Aurora" may need a bit more detail, like how close/far? Adding such details normally helps convince the mods (JJB for example) and usually gives the impression that your semblance isn't as powerful as the mods think.

To finish off, a question: How do you resist writing massive weapon sections? When creating a profile, I always think of the weapon first, then the semblance to complement, and the rest follows. The way you do it seems completely flipped round to me, not saying that's anything wrong :D
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Re: Aurora Hesperid
« Reply #7 on: March 12, 2017, 09:17:08 AM »
When I say crude, I mean that it's worse, it's just controlling proximity. Say there's a knife stuck in some Grimm. She can pull it back by using her semblance to increase its proximity. She can't, however, move it in any other way. Only to her and away from her. The specifics I will think of later, when I do not have a test looming.

Um, it's a weapon? What more can you say about it? Plus my weapons are never very complicated. I mean, one's basically a Kung Fu Panda rip-off, another is iffy and hard to imagine if described incorrectly so I kept it vague, and the rest are just super simple. I like to write the character first, I'm not so much a weapon and combat chick. Then I think of a semblance to complement it. This is my only character that has a semblance so tied in with her weapons. Though it fits her personality too, social butterfly, skilled in drawing people closer and farther.

Edit: Oh my god your weapon sections are huge. I'm impressed. I don't know how you could fit in so much for just a weapon.
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Re: Aurora Hesperid
« Reply #8 on: March 12, 2017, 09:29:09 AM »
Well, you're one to talk xD. Double-slitted maxi dress? Concealer? Garter belt? V-neck lace tank top???
God knows what you have in your wardrobe. (Not meant to criticise, just...what on earth) Also, the longer the weapon section, the more confused the mods get, so maybe it's not the best idea to jam every detail into a weapon.

One more question: can she hold several things in "orbit" around her, like her knives? So she becomes a spinning top of death or something?
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Re: Aurora Hesperid
« Reply #9 on: March 12, 2017, 10:06:53 AM »
Dude, I dress like a hobo irl. The reason why my characters are so fashionable is because I get to shove my dreams onto them. Not that I want to wear everything they do, I tend to err more on the modest side. Still though, clothes are my thing! I like putting outfits together and such, and I would hope that I'm good at it. In real life I just put on whatever's comfy, and I wear a uniform most of the time anyway.

No on the orbit. Though that might be something to look into if I ever upgrade her into a 2nd year.
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Re: Aurora Hesperid
« Reply #10 on: March 12, 2017, 11:52:22 AM »
Ah, it's all good with funky clothes. My wardrobe consists of t-shirts, jeans and hoodies along with a trenchcoat; not much variation for me either! As long as the appearance is explained, who gives a damn :D

If you want some help with weapon appearances or semblance costs, hit me up sometime and we can talk over it if you want, or we can go through different posts and going over it each time if you'd prefer that. For a simple description, however, I'd suggest describing these:

- Hilt: Colour / Material / Shape / Any extra features?
- Blade: Colour / Material / Shape / Any extra features?
- Abilities: Any innate abilities of the weapon? / Dust functions?

It sounds like a lot, but if you're just writing it out it really lasts about a paragraph, which is probably what we're looking for here! For semblance;
- If you are looking for some more ideas, perhaps she can 'tag' certain objects she has with her for a long time with her semblance, and then she can rotate their position around her body? Keeping the same proximity but changing them on a different axis as an advancement. Then again, it's always nice to keep things short and sweet; all up to you.
- In terms of costs, as a simpler semblance you can keep it quite low whatever you decide to use; I think the main factor would be the number of objects, the weight of objects (which are kind of the same thing barring ridiculous numbers) and the speed. If you can describe the cost for, say, a single one of her daggers, then say how it changes with speed and number, that would probably be fine.

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Re: Aurora Hesperid
« Reply #11 on: March 31, 2017, 08:45:04 AM »
Alright, I think I'm done with Ms. Hesperid. Anyone have anything to say, feel free to. Will move to Char. Creation is a couple of days.
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Re: Aurora Hesperid
« Reply #12 on: March 31, 2017, 09:32:32 AM »
One thing I've noticed is that while you've kept her combat behaviour balanced and simple, the mods may ask for one or two weaknesses just to make it clear. May want to add that in.

Also, when the ice dust-infused blades "gradually freeze the area", how long does it take? Is it like a flash-freeze (I'm assuming not)? How long does the ice last for?

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Re: Aurora Hesperid
« Reply #13 on: March 31, 2017, 08:36:46 PM »
That Combat Behavior isn't like I originally had it... I'll try to find the original one I had, or just rewrite it.

Edit: Alright, fixed that.

And uh, it's... gradual? Not flash-freeze. Better to just keep it vague for now. Not sure on specifics. It lasts for as long as normal ice lasts, depends on the outside temp.
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