First, welcome to the RP board! I'll do your first review, but I would like to first apologize if I come off as harsh. I believe in being very blunt and listing all the problems/concerns so they can all be addressed and you can RP faster. That said, let's do this:Occupation:Beacon isn't a High School. If anything, Signal Academy would be considered High School and Beacon would be considered College, but both are simply Academies so you'll want to change the description.History:Your history is very short...shorter than her appearance descriptions. Please add more detail: talk more about her childhood to help add more details about her so we can better know what she's like and what she's been through.Personality:This portion of her profile doesn't quite fit with everything else. If you're going to go heavily on Asian culture, then having her come from Atlas would not match, since Atlas is not a heavily Asian cultured place. Mistral is actually the place that is heavily Asian culture so everything about this character would fit better if she came from Mistral instead of Atlas. Also, if she's going to be a picture bride, then this is details that must be included in her history instead of only mentioned briefly in her personality.Semblance:You're going to have to go into more details here:1. How big of a shield are we talk about?2. How long does the shield last each time of use?3. What are the side effects or strains on her if she uses it for too long or too often? There will need to be a few of them.4. Just so you know this: the shield cannot be unbreakable. There needs to be a breaking point for the shield, so explain what that breaking point is.Combat Behavior:I see a lot of strengths and only one possible weakness. There needs to be at least 2-3 weaknesses that offset her strengths. I.E. seeing that she is a close combat fighter, one of her weaknesses can be against a ranged fighter in which she susceptible to taking heavy damage from it.Weapon:Fairly cut and dry here...nothing to unique or crazy. I do have a few questions/concerns:1. Can you please give a little bit of a better description as to how both swords transform into rifles? Doesn't need to be extremely detailed, but a little detail here would help.2. You have down that it uses orange and red dust. We actually don't go by color dusts here and, instead, we go by element. So fire, lightning, earth, gravity, wind, ice, etc. Those are the types of dust that we go by. That said, please explain what type of dust she will be using by the elements instead of by color.3. I'll quote it:If you're trying to imply that it's capable of shooting a laser type beam, then you'll either need to REALLY explain how that's possible or cut this off altogether. We've discussed these types of things among the staff on the board and have decided that high-tech type of weapons are only given on a trust basis to those who we know we can trust to not abuse them, since it's been heavily abused in the past. Laser beams falls within the high-tech type of weaponry so, unless you can describe it using dust, then either change the words so it'll fit better or remove it.That covers it for me. Again, I do apologize if I come off as harsh or rude. I simply want to get your character approved quickly so you can RP faster. Feel free to PM me if you have any questions.