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Re: Mavi Kobold
« Reply #15 on: November 26, 2016, 10:19:47 AM »
Okay, I added on to the dust functions and modded the sembalnce. I tried to add a good weakness, but poor endurance was the best I could do
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Re: Mavi Kobold
« Reply #16 on: November 26, 2016, 06:10:31 PM »
We're almost there! Two things left:

Semblance:
Having down that he can "take any melee damage" is still a bit too extreme. What would happen if he got stomped on by a giant Goliath with his semblance activated? Would that break it? You see what I'm saying? I would re-word it to say that he can "take most melee damage" or "take almost any melee damage", indicating that there is a possibility of it breaking due to a certain amount of physical damage. The gunshot portion is a good mix into it, but you could just have it worded that any heavy fire would hurt him, but a normal bullet doesn't hurt him too much.

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He can then guide the shot by slashing with the Saber
What are you trying to say here? Does this mean he can control his bullets like a guided missile? If that is the case, then that doesn't quite fit as wind and fire dust wouldn't really give you the ability to control your shot.
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Re: Mavi Kobold
« Reply #17 on: November 27, 2016, 07:27:44 PM »
Done again
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Re: Mavi Kobold
« Reply #18 on: November 27, 2016, 10:58:54 PM »
Hmmmm...doesn't quite explain what you're talking about with the weapon, but I kinda get what you're trying to say. Overall, everything looks fine to me so...

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Re: Mavi Kobold
« Reply #19 on: June 15, 2017, 03:48:13 PM »
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Name: Mavi Kobold

Age: 17

Species and Gender: Human Male

Symbol: http://dragolianx.deviantart.com/art/Mavi-Kobold-Symbol-642185455

Occupation: Hunter in training 1st year at Shade Academy

Appearance: Tall well-built with a dark complection, around 6’2 weighs around 200lbs. Slightly spiky black hair, dark blue eyes, black T-Shirt with white sleeves, blue vest with a gold trim, black pants, black and white sneakers. 

History: Mavi was born in Vacuo. His family wasn’t very wealthy because his father was a retired hunter and worked with his mom at a weapon repair shop. As a kid he liked to watch action movies with his dad. His mom wanted him to get a job as an engineer. However, Mavi wanted to be a hunter like his dad used to be. Whenever they weren’t watching action movies or fixing weapons Mavi’s dad would teach him karate.
During his training Mavi had his aura unlocked by his dad. He learned many forms and techniques from his father while training in the martial arts. Mavi’s father mainly taught him the Uechi-ryū Seisan style of Karate, which focuses mainly on three strikes at a time. The main strikes Mavi learned were one knuckle strikes, front kick strikes, and spearhand strikes.
One day while Mavi’s parents were out of the shop one of the shelves fell and almost crushed him. Luckily for him his semblance kicked in and protected him from harm. When his parents got home and saw one of their shelves broken they asked their son one happened. Mavi’s father seemed to know what his son did, and decided to test his theory in their next training session. The next time Mavi’s father trained his son he used a wooden bo staff to attack his son. Mavi instinctively raised his arms and the staff shattered upon impact. It was then that Mavi’s father told his son that he had unlocked his semblance. He could turn his skin as hard as stone. Mavi then decided to try and use his semblance every time he trained, but soon learned about its limits. He could only hold it for around three and half minutes until the effect wore off, and that continued use would drain his aura too quickly.
In order to help with this problem, Mavi’s father invented his barrier gloves. At first glance the gloves looked like a regular pair of black work gloves. The hands had blue padding on them, but the back of each hand a circular ring on them. There was also a pair of metallic wristbands that went along with the gloves. When Mavi put them on his father told him to flick his wrist. When he did a 2ft energy shield appeared on the back of the gloves. With his new weapon Mavi continued his training.
Around the time Mavi turned 13 his father registered him to go to Oasis Academy so he could continue his training. While at Oasis Mavi found out that all of the other kids there were just as good as he was, and this motivated him to get even better. Whenever there was a sparring match Mavi would always try to win, but he never fights dirty. While at Oasis Mavi decided to upgrade his weapon as well making it easier to use and more compatible with dust. Once Mavi turned 17 he graduated from Oasis and went on to Shade Academy.


Personality: Whenever he’s in a bad mood he mouths off to anyone around him, including any authority figures. Mavi is very sociable. He makes friends by fighting with them. He treats friends with respect, but does argue about which one of them is. Mavi treats his enemies with enough respect to fight them with everything he has. He respects authority figures with respect, but does end up mouthing off when he’s mad. Mavi likes to read action stories in his spare time. He also has an addiction to cashews and keeps a small baggie of them in his pocket at all times. Also Mavi is terrible at math, whenever he tries he ends up with a huge headache.

Aura and Semblance: Unbreakable Skin – Mavi’s skin can harden for up to 30-40 seconds at a time. While hardened Mavi can take any melee attack, gunshots still hurt him. If Mavi uses his semblance too soon after his time limit runs out, he’ll run the risk of draining his aura too fast. He would have to wait about 1-2 minutes for it to cool down. However if he were to take a strong enough hit his semblance would instantly cancel out.
Example 1: Mavi meets Nora. He tells Nora that pancakes are gross. Nora pulls out her hammer. Mavi tries to use his semblance. Nora hits Mavi with her hammer. Mavi gets wrecked.

Combat Behavior: When in combat Mavi uses the Sanchin stance to keep himself steady. This stance also helps him withstand any opponents blows. Mavi’s Uechi-ryū Seisan style of Karate focuses mainly on three strikes at a time. The main strikes Mavi learned were one knuckle strikes, front kick strikes, and spearhand strikes. He activates his semblance in short bursts in order to protect himself from and minor damage. In addition to this Mavi also trained with a sword and pistol. Mavi is also conscious about not fighting dirty when fighting. When in combat Mavi is known to have a delayed reaction time if his opponent moves too fast.Another thing to take into consideration is Mavi’s endurance. Thanks to his semblance he can protect himself for a little bit, but if a fight gets dragged on for too long he will start to feel exhausted.
Uechi-ryū Seisan style
 -Knuckle Strikes
 -Quick Punches
 -Quick Kicks
 -Spearhand Strikes
Sanchin stance – Used to keep himself steady


WEAPON

Name: Bolt Saber

Primary Form: A blue curved pistol. A 2ft curved blade is attached to the top by a hinge. A slot for dust cartridges can be located on the back strap.

Secondary Form: The blade folds out and locks in place on the barrel. Mavi is still able to fire off dust rounds while his weapon is in Saber mode.

Dust Functions: When dust in inserted into the cartridge Mavi can fire them with his bullets when his weapon is in pistol form. When his weapon is in Saber form he can still fire off a dust round, but it will split when it hits the saber. He can then guide the shot by slashing with the Saber sort of like this(http://www.ssbwiki.com/images/thumb/0/03/CloudNeutral1-SSB4.png/200px-CloudNeutral1-SSB4.png) . He mostly uses Fire and Wind dust to do this. When in pistol form he can load up Fire, Wind, and Lighting Dust to add that element to his bullets.

History: Mavi learned that he had to make a weapon when he got to Oasis, and he couldn’t choose between a sword or a gun since he had training in both. So he decided to make a combination of the two. With a little help from home he was able to forge a gun that could also double as a sword when the need arises.



Name meaning: Mavi is Turkish for blue. Kobold is German for goblin ore which produces a blue pigment.

Origin & Influences: Mostly influenced by the Blue Ranger from Power Ranger Dino Thunder in terms of semblance. As for the weapon, minor Captain America influence.

Region: Vacuo

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Re: Mavi Kobold
« Reply #20 on: September 12, 2017, 03:40:31 PM »
Moving back to approved as no edits have been made.
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Council Member: Phaedo Katsaros ~ Figurehead for Faunus/Human relations
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40th Vytal Tournament Champion: Zabar Aga ~ Member of Team DAWN
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Huntress: Malina Nahualli-Roth ~ Leader of Team MCCA
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Drop-out: Durian Ghede ~ Former leader of team DFDL
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