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Mikado Drak
« on: December 17, 2017, 12:02:55 PM »
CHARACTER

Name: Mikado Drak

Name meaning:

Mikado -> Candy which is also called Pocky in England or other countries.
Drak -> Dragon

Theme: Link

Age: 17  (30.09.xxxx)

Species and Gender: Human, Male

Symbol:

Spoiler: show


Occupation: First Year Beacon Student

Appearance:

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Mikado’s height amount to 190cm, which is extremely huge for his age. He weights about 75Kg.
Mikado has a pale skin color, a long face and nose and small eyes. He has short, messy black hair with a thumb thick white streak over his face.

He wears a white Shirt with a black and white garment over it and fitting black trousers . Mikado has white bandages from his wrist up to the elbows and from the foot up to the kneecaps . He also has a large Dragon tattoo over his back . He uses those clothings for freetime activities and for battle

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History:

Mikado was born in a rather big village in the south of remnant. He never got to know his mother and he lived his whole life with his father, Of course there were times when he asked about his mother but his father always avoided the question, up to the day he died.

Mikado was 12 years old when it happened. He just bought some food when a terrorist attack left the village in panic. Everything happened so fast. There was a huge explosion caused by dust in the center of the village. About 3 houses were completely destroyed with only corpses buried under the rubble. Other buildings broke down or were just barely standing. The panic lured the Grimm to the village. Nearly everything was present. Beowolves, Nevermores and more.

The Grimm started destroying houses and killing people, but Mikado’s thought about something else. The dust explosion went off near his house! His father was still at home! Mikado started running. The Grimm luckily were busy killing others and didn't pay so much attention to him. He ran around the last corner, only to see his father, buried under a wooden beam. Mikado ran to him, shakes him and screamed at him to wake up, but he was already death. A loud scream filling the air and Mikado saw a monster, a Grimm, but not any. He never heard about a Grimm looking like this. He looked like being made out of different typed of animals. A Chimera. It had the claws of a hawk, the body of a horse, the head of a lion, a scorpion tail and bat like wings.

He called it the ‚Chimera-Grimm‘. It spotted him and slowly, very slowly looked at him. At the same time another person came up behind him. His name was Jack Tine and he was a huntsmen. They never had Griimm problems before thanks to him, but this time, there were to many Grimm for him to take down alone. Mikado knew Jack really well. He and his father had spent a lot of time with him and they actually became good friends. Jack didn't waste any time. The Chimera-Grimm now started running towards them. Jack grabbed Mikado and threw him over his back. There was no way he could fight that thing, not now, not with the injuries he already had.

Jack used his weapon to swing at a not so broken roof. The second his feet made contact with the roof, the Chimera-Grimm crashed into them and the building collapsed. Just before Mikado lost consciousness he saw a black shadow tackle the Grimm and then everything went black.

Mikado woke up in a cabin which was located in a forest not too far away from his village. Jack, who brought him there told him what happened, that a small dragon trusted the Chimera-Grimm away, allowing him to land a blow in his shoulder, through which they were able to escape. From this day on, Mikado swore himself to become a huntsmen.

He trained everyday with Jack. He learned quickly and could work with all kinds of weapons in short time. In the end he stayed with a bō and Kusarigama. Mikado was also gifted in hand to hand combat, even though he prefers not to uses his fist's in fights.

After those five years Mikado finally took the entry exam and passed with a relatively high score in hand to hand combat, Grimm extermination and passed with an average score at the Academic test

Personality:

Mikado is a quiet person. He never was good with people and won’t care about making friends or not. He often acts cold and like he didn't care, but if he see's someone gets beaten up he will act, and he won't go easy on him.

Having a conversation with him is almost impossible. Most of his responses are a nod or single word at most. His Dragon Kiro isn't a help there either, more like the opposite. Most people start asking every kind of question about him, not realizing how annoying there are. People mostly will either think of him as a cool or strange person.

Mikado likes dark and quiet places, where he can be alone. He spends his freetime either reading or training.

Even though he is an intelligence boy, he never really pays attention in class. He doesn’t like studying, because he doesn’t see a reason in spending his time for earning stuff he might don’t need ever again.

Aura and Semblance:

Aura Color: Black

Mikado’s semblance is called ‚Spirit Dragon‘
Just like the name says, its a Aura-Dragon which is connected with Mikado through there spirits.
The Semblance name may be Spirit Dragon, but Mikado decided to name the Dragon after the dragon ‚Kiro’ in a not so well known fairytale. Mikado doesn’t need to trigger some events or do something to activate his semblance, it’s just there. Through to Mikado, not spending much time in training with his Aura for defense he more focused on putting everything in his semblance. He managed to hold his semblance up permanently, which leads to Mikado being followed by Kiro 24/7.

To his appearance. In battle Kiro is a Black-Greyish Dragon with the size of a fully grown Quarter Horse. This means, That his height from the bottom up to his shoulders amount to 175cm. He is 569cm wide (If he stretches his wings to both sides) and 843kg heavy. Just like the dragons in different stories, does Kiro have Scale’s, horns, a tail and of course, wings.

Outside of battle he turns into a more rabbit sized form. Keeping him up for more than 4 hours in his grown up form will get Mikado exhausted up to the point of him not being able so summon him at all. Kiro still has all of his abilities in his smaller form, but a lot weaker and less effective. He still can fly, but not as high and long as in his grown form. He also can still breath fire,ice and lightning even though it’s only a small flame or a small ice breath.

Spoiler: How Kiro looks like • show


Now to his fighting style and other information, but befor this, it need to be said that Kiro is only a 'thing' created by auro. He is just an empty shell which can't do anything without someone telling him to, and this someone is Mikado and Mikaodo only.
Kiro is a defensive fighter and is trained to keep his distance. He either is in the air or on the ground while breathing fire, ice or lightning. To do this he needs to be feed a fire/ice/lightning dust crystal
every day, or his fire/ice/lightning will run out. It also only works with fire, ice and lightning crystals. Kiro apparently also likes the taste of the crystals which leads to Mikado sometimes just gives him one as a treat. Even though he is a defensive fighter he can switch to the offensive and charges at the enemy. Thanks to the long, sharp teeth and claws it isn’t hard to strike. This all looks like a really powerful semblance but it comes with a great disadvantage. Mikado and Kiro are connected through there minds. If Kiro get’s wounded, Mikado will feel the pain, but doesn't get the wound. Imagine someone or something would cut off on of Kiro’s legs, Mikado will still have all his limbs but he would also feel the pain exploding through his leg as if he just lost one. That leads to the next part. Kiro has a good defense, most thanks to the hard scales, but if he suffers a more dangerous attack, which lead him injured or even make him lost on of his limbs, the wound needs to take depending on how great the damage was half a day until two days to recover. The ‚pain-linking‘ between those two may only be one-sided (Kiro -> Mikado) But if Mikado would lose consciousness Kiro simply will disappear. That's also the case if Mikado is sleeping.

Mikado’s semblance also has a limited reach. If Kiro is more than 3km away from Mikado, he will simply disappear. Kiro will only listen to Mikado and will do everything he tells him to. Mikado also taught Kiro commands like *warte* (wait) *Fackel* (using his fire breath) or *Fass* (Telling him to attack with his claws/teeth)

One of the things you can’t do with Kiro is flying. Neither Mikado nor somebody else will ever be able to ride on him. If someone tries to ride on his back, he will jump and roll around until the person on his back let go. Outside of battle Mikado tends to ‚Talk‘ to Kiro, even if Kiro can’t answer him, Mikado will know what he wants to say.

Combat Behavior:

Mikado isn’t a team player. He never was. He learned to fight alone and only with his dragon.
He is a skilled pugilism fighter, but he doesn't use his fists in fights often. He will use his weapon Pocky, while Kiro fights besides him.

He won’t listen to the leader and goes into fights with his own plan.

Mikado is swift and maneuverable, is also quiet and good in creeping up which are all plus points for the fight. His most dangerous weak point is his semblance. Through the pain linking between Kiro and Mikado it is possible to disabled him for rest of the fight, if the attack is strong enough to take Kiro down.
Apart from this, his only other weaknesses are his bad endurance and his stubbornness.



WEAPON

Name: Pocky


Primary Form:

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Pocky is a bō staff, which has an extendable blade. It’s 182cm long and is made out of light metal. He carries it around on his back.

Secondary Form:

Pocky’s second form is a Kusarigama. He normally swings the weighted chain in a circle over his head till he swings it toward the opponent to entangle his weapon or to immobilizing there arms or legs. This will allow him to strike with the sickle.

Dust Functions

Fire The Blade (In both forms) will go up in flames

Ice The blade will freeze the ground on impact

Transformation:

(The Blade of the Bō need's to be pulled in for the transformation.)
The darker part of his weapon is like a shell where the Kusarigama is in. You grab it on the lighter part and simply pull out the rest. The Part you grabbed it on is the weighted end of the Kusarigama chain and the extendable blade of the Bō turns to the sickle of the Kusarigama.

History:

Jack taught Mikado how to use and build weapons. It took him some time to create Pocky but the second he finished it, he was able to use  it perfectly and without any problems.

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« Last Edit: January 06, 2018, 07:43:27 AM by DEXES »
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Re: Mikado Drak
« Reply #1 on: December 18, 2017, 04:41:38 AM »
See I can be cool and use gifs to guys.


In all honesty I was wondering what happened to this guy. Sorry I was a bit harsh in WiP but it is looking a lot better from what I remember.

So I only have a few minor complaints; Firstly in the history Mikado's first ever use of his semblance forcing back a Grimm which would overpower a full blown hunter even if said hunter is injured at ten years old is a bit much. I know what you are trying to get at but if you want Mikado to contribute to the fight have it slow the Crimera-Grimm down for Jack to finish off.

Awww rabbit sized dragon sounds so cute. I'm going to need you to specify that no one can ride the dragon tho. Just so everything is clear.

Combat behaviour could use some more detail as well, like how does Kiro fight beyond simply being most defensive. Should add more weaknesses as well, the pain link balances the semblance but not the rest of his combat behaviour.

Weapon is good but are there any dust functions?

I'd also recommend running this through grammarly or another grammar checking software to help with some of your tenses which got mixed up.

Otherwise the character looks ready to play. Good job.
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Re: Mikado Drak
« Reply #2 on: December 18, 2017, 07:42:16 AM »
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Firstly in the history Mikado's first ever use of his semblance forcing back a Grimm which would overpower a full blown hunter even if said hunter is injured at ten years old is a bit much. I know what you are trying to get at but if you want Mikado to contribute to the fight have it slow the Crimera-Grimm down for Jack to finish off.

The idea was to let the Chimera-Grimm life. Kiro only pushed him aside to let Jack and Mikado flee.
Well, I made Mikado twelve years old, hope thats better.

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Awww rabbit sized dragon sounds so cute. I'm going to need you to specify that no one can ride the dragon tho. Just so everything is clear.

One of the things you can’t do with Kiro is flying. Neither Mikado nor somebody else will ever be able to ride on him. If someone tries to ride on his back, he will jump and roll around until the person lets go.
Don't know how to descrip it better, sry

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Combat behaviour could use some more detail as well, like how does Kiro fight beyond simply being most defensive. Should add more weaknesses as well, the pain link balances the semblance but not the rest of his combat behaviour.

Kiro is a defensive fighter and is trained to keep his distance. He either is in the air or on the ground while breathing fire, ice or lightning.

Apart from this, Mikado's only other weaknesses are his bad endurance and his stubbornness.

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Weapon is good but are there any dust functions?

Fire Dust: The Blade (In both forms) will go up in flames

Ice: The blade will freeze the ground on impact


He uses most of his dust for his semblance so I through it's good to belanced it out with his weapon.

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I'd also recommend running this through grammarly or another grammar checking software to help with some of your tenses which got mixed up.

I'll do that as soon as everything else is okay
« Last Edit: December 18, 2017, 07:44:13 AM by DEXES »
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Re: Mikado Drak
« Reply #3 on: December 18, 2017, 07:32:20 PM »
Most of your descriptions are fine but I'm going to have to come back to the Chimera-Grimm thing. You can have it live it's just having Mikado play a serious role in defeating it the first time as an untrained child isn't something we are OK with. Have it help Jack beat back the Grimm but it escapes or something like that.
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Re: Mikado Drak
« Reply #4 on: December 19, 2017, 07:21:27 AM »
Most of your descriptions are fine but I'm going to have to come back to the Chimera-Grimm thing. You can have it live it's just having Mikado play a serious role in defeating it the first time as an untrained child isn't something we are OK with. Have it help Jack beat back the Grimm but it escapes or something like that.

[...]Jack, who brought him there told him what happened, that a small dragon thrusted the Chimera-Grimm away, allowing him to land a blow in his shoulder, through which they were able to escape. [...]
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Re: Mikado Drak
« Reply #5 on: December 19, 2017, 01:40:02 PM »
Perfect, just remember that grammar check thing.

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Re: Mikado Drak
« Reply #6 on: December 19, 2017, 03:28:06 PM »
Okay, a checking program just look over it quickly and most of it should be okay now, at least I hope so
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Re: Mikado Drak
« Reply #7 on: January 04, 2018, 11:47:01 AM »
My apologies for the long delay here. The holidays made it difficult to review characters, but that's still unacceptable on our end to let this go for so long.

My only concern is the semblance and here's why:

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Creation Powers. You cannot create a hammer made out of a physical matter. You can create a hammer made out of Aura, which would dissipate when you let go of it or ran out of Aura.
  • Aura Constructs do not have consciousness, and cannot make decisions on their own. They will follow instructions given to them by their creator, however.

This is taken right out of our Character Template and Rules section. From what it sounds like, it sounds like Kiro has a mind of his own. As you can see where I'm going with this, this semblance is basically a creation semblance, which would have to follow the rules listed above. Kiro can be a dragon, but you will need to state that he is an aura created dragon, thus he will have to look the part. He also can't have his own fully functioning conscience, but can only do what Mikado instructs him to do. That will also need to be stated.

Aside from that, everything else is fine. I personally love dragons (my picture might give that away) so I would love to see this character approved and in action :). Feel free to PM me here or on Discord if you have any questions.
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Re: Mikado Drak
« Reply #8 on: January 06, 2018, 07:44:53 AM »
It's okay, i was bussy too.

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Now to his fighting style and other information, but befor this, it need to be said that Kiro is only a 'thing' created by auro. He is just an empty shell which can't do anything without someone telling him to, and this someone is Mikado and Mikaodo only.
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Re: Mikado Drak
« Reply #9 on: January 09, 2018, 12:52:51 PM »
Works for me.

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