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Mikado Drak
« on: October 18, 2017, 12:05:39 PM »
CHARACTER

Name: Mikado Drak

Age: 17

Species and Gender: Human, Male

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Occupation: First Year Beacon Student

Appearance:

Mikado’s hight amount to 190cm, which is extremely huge for his age. He weights about 75Kg.
Mikado has a pale skin color, a long face and nose and small eyes. He has short, messy black hair with a thumb thick white streak over his face.

He wears a white Shirt with an black and white garment over it and fitting black trousers. Mikado has white bandages from his wrist up to the elbows and from the foot up to the kneecaps. He also has a large Dragon tatto over his back. He uses those clothing for freetime activities and for battle


History:

Mikado was born in a rather big village in the south of remnant. He was the First child of Yuka Plame and Toni Pendo. His Mother always loved and cared about him, his father on the other hand, only made him so he had a tool, a person to tortured, or how he would call it ‚train‘ him.

When he was four, he got a little sister, Sy. A year after the real torture started. His Father woke him up at 4am with a bucket of ice water. If he didn't changed clothes in exactly 68 seconds his dad used to shout or sometimes even to hit him. The day startet then with a parkour, which took place in a huge hall the family owned. His parents ore rather his father was rich due to him being a successful huntsmen, and he wantet to make his son the best huntsmen ever. And he didn't cared about the consequences. After the parkour he was allowed to eat and drink something. Something which barely stopped his hunger. After that the training continues. For a 5  years old it would be completely impossible, at it was. He often lost consciousness or came to the point that his body refused to move and vomit everything out, what his father didn't accepted.
There of course were times where his mother tried to stop his father, what leaded to her getting hit.

After two and a half year later, she left. Without a word, she was just gone. Leaving him and his sister alone with his father. This was the time Toni also started to ‚train‘ Sy. Till that point he didn't knew which child was ‚made‘ right to become number 1.
Mikado found out, that the only reason his father married his mother and that they got kids was for his selfish reason to say, that his child was the best. His Mother had an really rare and powerful semblance. She could creat a dragon. A small and not powerfull on, but a dragon. She didn't used her semblance though, but knowing it was there was enough for his Father. His semblance was only to creat fire in his Hands, and using this as a blast. So he thought by combining those two semblances, he could make a weapon, his weapon. The only thing he didn’t knew. Which of his children had this semblance? Did at least one had this dragon?
With this through in mind, he keept training those two. Mikado grew up to a good fighter, while his sister often had problems with keeping up.

On night, when he was 16- and his sister 12 years old, his father came home drunk.
Mikado and Sy always sticked together like glue and Mikado would have never let his father done something like this when he was home, but he wasn’t. So, his father didn't hold back. He went to Sy’s room and just started to beating her up. The girl tried to defend herself, but she couldn't do much. Luckily, she had a chat with her brother when her father bursted into the room. It didn't took long until Mikado arrived, to see his father over his beaten sister. Realizing that he couldn't get away with an excus, his father started to attack Mikado. The fight went bad for Mikado, until, just befor he was about to lost consciousness, his semblance activated. His father let go of him and simply left the room, while his sister came crawling to him to help. Both of them than decided that it was time to leave. To do the same thing as their mother did. The next day, there were gone.

They went to vale, not only because there is an academy for training huntsmen, but it was also the one, which his father hated the most. Beacon. Mikado never knew why he hated this academy, but he actually didn't care.
His sister decided to live in a village, with the money they took befor running away, near the academy, where she often get’s visited by Mikado.
Entering the academy wasn’t hard. He passed the entering exam and was rather quick accepted.

Personality:

Mikado is a quiet and calm person. He never was good with people and won’t care about making friends, but that doesn't make him to a careless person in general. We won’t just stand by and watch when somebody gets bullied or beaten up infront of his eyes and we would never turn his back to somebody who needs his help, although he doesn't really care about getting into the privacy of other people.

Mikado also doesn’t talk much to beginn with and to find a fitting topic for an conversation isn’t an easy task either. Most people ask him either about his father, which is one of the things he hates to talk about the most or they start asking everything about ‚Kiro’ his dragon, up to the part of petting him. If a person manages to become friends with him, Mikado will always have an eye on him, becoming a bit overprotective, but in his cool and calm way.

Mikado often stops by at the library of the academy. He likes quite places in general so it fits him well, and the fact that he likes reading supports his stay there. Seeing him on the training ground isn't that rare either. Practice is one of the most important thinks for him. One thing he also is good at is to assess people's character.

He is a intelligence Boy and always pays attention in class, which you can see if you look at his grades. Even though he is a good student, he doesn't like studying, there are way better thinks to spend his time then learning stuff you might don’t need again.

Aura and Semblance:

Aura Color: Black

Mikado’s semblace is called 'Spirit Dragon‘
Just like the name says, its a Dragon which is connectet with Mikado through there minds.
The Semblance name may be Spirit Dragon, but Mikado decided to name the Dragon after the dragon ‚Kiro’ in a not so well known fairytale. Mikado don’t need to trigger some events or do something to activate his semblance, it’s just there. Through to Mikado, not spending much time in training with his Aura for defence he more focused on putting everything in his semblance. He managed to hold his semblance up permanently, which leads to Mikado being followed by Kiro 24/7.

To his appearance. Kiro is a Black-Greyish Dragon of the size of an grown up Quarter Horse. This means, That his hight from the bottom to his shoulder amount to 175cm. He is 569cm wide (If he streches his wings to both sides) and 843kg heavy. Just like the dragons in different stories, does Kiro have Scale’s, horns, a tail and of course, wings.

How Kiro looks like: ShowHide


Now to his fighting style and other information. Kiro is a defensiv fighter. He either is in the air or on the ground while breathing fire or ice. To do this he needs to be feed a fire dust cristal every day, or his fire will run out. It also only works with fire and ice cristals. Kiro apparently also likes the taste of the cristals which leads to Mikado sometimes just give him one as a treat. Even though he is a defensive fighter he can switch to the offensive and charches at the enemy. Thanks to the long, sharp teeth and claws it isn’t hard to strike. This all looks like a really powerful semblance but it comes with a great disadvantage. Both, Holder and spirit are connectet through there minds. If Kiro get’s wounded, Mikado will feel the pain, but doesn't get the wound. Imagine someone or something would cut of on of Kiro’s legs, Mikado will still have all his limbs but he would also feel the pain exploding through his leg as if he just lost one. That leads to the next part. Kiro has a good defense, most thanks to the hard scales, but if he suffers a more dangerous attack, which lead him injured or even make him lost on of his limbs, the wound needs to take depending on how great the damage was half a day until two days to recover. The ‚pain-linking‘ between those two may only be one-sided (Kiro -> Mikado) But if Mikado would lose consciousness Kiro simply will disappear. Mikado’s semblance also has a limited reach. If Kiro is more than 3km away from Mikado, he will simply disappear. Kiro will follow everything what Mikado says. Outside of battle Mikado tends to ‚Talk‘ to Kiro, even if Kiro can’t answer him, Mikado will know what he wants to say.

Combat Behavior:

Mikado isn’t a team player. He never was. He learned to fight alone and only with his dragon.
He is a skilled pugilism fighter, but he doesn't uses his fists in fights often.
Most of the time, he rides Kiro while fighting. It give’s him a good defense and he had a better view over the battlefield. However, he can't do more than ride on hime and give him a few commands. He can´t stand on him, without falling off. On the ground he will use his weapon Pocky, while Kiro fights besides him.

He never fought in a team, but he will wait and listen to the plan of the leader and even adds his own thoughts into it.

Mikado is swift and maneuverable, but also quiet and good in creeping up which are all plus points for the fight. His most dangerous weakpoint is his semblance. Through the pain linking between Kiro and Mikado, it is possible to disabled him for rest of the fight, if the attack is strong enough to cut off one of the limps of kiro.


WEAPON

Name: Pocky

Primary Form:

Pocky is a bō staff, which has an extendable blade. It’s 182cm long and is made out of light metal. He carries it around on his back. Pocky also can’t use dust.

History:

When Sy and Mikado to vale, they visited a weapon shop. The shop owner asked a few questions and after taking unit of measurement he made a bō staff for Mikado. The shop owner told him a few things befor giving him the finished weapon. It was already colored, but that didn't concern him. He had one year time, befor he would entering beacon, so he used this time to get to know his weapon and he learned rather quick to use it. Because of the training with his father, he fought with quite a few weapons already, so using a bō wasn’t a hard task.
« Last Edit: February 27, 2019, 10:52:40 AM by DEXES »
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Re: Mikado Drak
« Reply #1 on: October 19, 2017, 02:06:12 AM »
Aldready working on character #2 wonderful. My two biggest issues with the character in it's current form focus on core elements of Mikado but please don't be dissuaded.
  • Firstly the character in general seems to have a lot in common with that fire and ice guy from My Hero Academia; father with fire based powers marries someone for their semblance to produce the best hero huntsman which results in serious child abuse. The mother leaves the picture which only escalates the abuse but despite all this Todoroki Mikado continues on his path to being a hero huntsman in a way contradicting the fathers philosophy. There is nothing wrong with taking inspiration from another medium but really try to play up the differences between them. Another issue is that the worlds are very different, heroes in My Hero Academia are given freedom for the same reason people with conventional power do in our world while on Remnant the very existence of negative emotions draws the main treat closer. So people would likely be a lot less accepting of the fathers training style. Also above all this there is only one heredity semblance in setting so unless the mother had one of those the whole plan doesn't makes sense.
  • The semblance is substantially too strong. Aura constructs would be fine but not having it out all the time and probably not flying on it. The latter is more of a balance thing as otherwise Mikado could just fly above people dropping rocks. Maybe an hour or two duration but taking hits lowers that maybe in a percentage of Aura=minute ratio

Little stuff like spend some time thinking how Mikado and his sister are providing for themselves or how they afforded to buy weapons after running away. 'Pugilist' specifically refers to boxers if I remember correctly, just making sure you know that. Also in the history could you add how old the characters involved are during these events, particularly when they run away from home.
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Re: Mikado Drak
« Reply #2 on: October 19, 2017, 11:55:46 AM »
Okay, yeah, I kinda copied the sory of Todoroki, but I also made a few changes

  • Todoroki new his mother was in hospital, but Mikado has no idea where his mother his
  • Endeavor (Todoroki's father) never hated UA but Mikado's father hates Beacon
  • Todoroki rejected his flames he got from his father but Mikado doesn´t have a problem using fire cristals for Kiro
  • Todoroki has siblings ( I think 1 or 2 brothers and 3 sisters or so) And Mikado has only Sy. We also never saw Todoroki's siblings training or really acting with his brother
  • Mikado's mother wasn't caught running away
  • Todoroki never run away from his father

Those are just a few changes I did, but I guess I can change the story up a bit more.

To the semblance:

  • Kiro isn't there 24/7 anymore. He will disappear when mikado sleeps (which are about 6-8 hours)
  • Mikado can only ride on Kiro and give him some commands. He can´t stand on him and act out moves
  • Also, Mkado's aura isn't the slightest to protect him self from attacks. His aura is specified for his semblance. that´s why he can hold it up for so long

Well, I would really like to let the semblance like this, if possible
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Re: Mikado Drak
« Reply #3 on: October 19, 2017, 07:31:35 PM »
Sure there are minor story points which seperate Todoroki and Mikado but their character's are almost identical, even the fire thing for Todoroki is becoming less important as the My Hero Academia story continues. Moving forward I think it might be best to brain storm character traits which make sense for Mikado but Todoroki doesn't have. An example could be that because Mikado has run away from home and even has a dependant in the form of his sister he is a lot more financially minded. As such Mikado may have to take more missions or even more questionable missions. Then think about how this affects Mikado and his relationships with others.

As for the semblance being able to keep it up whenever Mikado is awake is still basically always active. Although there are examples both on this site and in the show of passive semblances they are of much weaker abilities. If you really want the dragon around all the time there are two options which might be acceptable; the easiest would be having only Mikado be able to see the dragon out of combat or maybe having the dragon take a more wisp-like form and only becoming solid in combat. I'm only giving advise but I would really recommend getting rid of flying. Flying is a far too powerful semblance in isolation but Mikado can fly and do so much more.
No criticism is too harsh so hit me with your best shot.

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Re: Mikado Drak
« Reply #4 on: October 22, 2017, 02:54:30 PM »
Sorry for the late answer (life is busy)

Anyway, I decided to most likely rewrite everything, especially the history.
It propaply will take a few days until I rewrote everything, but I will leave a message when I'm done :)
Hyperactive weirdo Kisha Miles  - Beacon First Year - Team INKK/Ink
Dragon tamer Mikado Drak - Beacon First Year - Team DASE/Days
Compulsive gamer Dawn Mae - Beacon Second Year - Team ----
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